Comments: 48
minchanexcels [2007-12-17 17:08:22 +0000 UTC]
Ho' shat. xD
That was GOOD -- and so flipping true.
Damn. Seventh grade was pretty rough, as I recall it now.
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ElweArnutuile [2007-08-28 21:06:53 +0000 UTC]
I was very surprised with the third last sentence. That shocked me, but in a good way. Great story!
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Sheledriia [2006-11-04 03:28:10 +0000 UTC]
It makes me smile.
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urwesleyb [2006-08-02 05:57:06 +0000 UTC]
Short stories are my favourite. I love the twist at the end, and how even though it's short, it had all kinds of drama to it. You're a great writer Ian
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laily [2006-06-15 15:58:01 +0000 UTC]
i didn't put much thought into this piece first time reading it. for some reason i went back to it today and as reading along with the characters, they totally reminded me of so many things in high school back then. people always say, adults particularly, that being a kid is easy sweet and innocent, but i think when we look back at that time of our life, being a kid sometimes is even harder than adult, just because i really can't do nothing for so many things.
the story gives me the chill... not because of the ending but for how realistic it can be.
great writing.
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Lamb-child [2006-06-14 18:17:28 +0000 UTC]
This was wonderful to read.
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brain-tree [2006-06-13 06:50:39 +0000 UTC]
Rofl this is so hilariously realistic is shouldn't even be labeled "fiction". Great great work.
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Sleepless-Dreams [2006-06-10 23:35:57 +0000 UTC]
you always amaze me. Great story. lub.
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Necro-moonie [2006-06-09 20:36:20 +0000 UTC]
That was really creepy, in a good way. It was really well written and interesting.
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artemisballet [2006-06-09 01:17:35 +0000 UTC]
actually pretty good..really, it was.
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snoozie-q [2006-06-09 00:32:10 +0000 UTC]
very cool although was hoping for more gay overtones ^_^
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ClaudeMonet [2006-06-09 00:09:21 +0000 UTC]
Hum.... When I saw the title, it reminded me of a certain familar phrase.
"You killed Kenny! You bastard!" XD
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thatpalechick [2006-06-08 16:53:46 +0000 UTC]
Awesome! One or two little errors, but they don't distract from the amazing story. Absolutely wicked ending!
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nightlydeity [2006-06-08 03:35:05 +0000 UTC]
oh wow! ian when i read that anti freeze...i nearly cracked, you write some seriously wicked endings!
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Spazzgurl [2006-06-07 22:42:21 +0000 UTC]
Very well thought out. Nice writing.
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Gata-de-la-Noche [2006-06-07 15:42:38 +0000 UTC]
Very nice story. A bit predictable, in the end. The result, at least, perhaps not all the means. Some grammatical flaw, but nothing that is that bad. Missed commas and such. But, overall, very nicely done. Well delivered. You hit the whole mid school experience right on. At least, taht's how it went in my place. A lot of people can't do the persecuted, disliked thing well; they take it overboard, make the victim antagonistic, almost asking for abuse. But you handled it very well, allowed the reader to sympathize. I honestly hate it when you read a story, and you're supposed to feel sorry for someone, but you have to say you really would want to punch them, given the way they are acting.
Well, I've rambled on longer than I meant. Very nice story with a happy little twist!
Later!
Gata
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callyn [2006-06-07 12:29:39 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Cool stuff.
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LadyPeruch [2006-06-07 10:57:10 +0000 UTC]
Thats brilliant.
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youliedanyway [2006-06-07 05:43:29 +0000 UTC]
I love it! It's poigniant and flavorful (mm... chocolate...) I love it. It's the kind of story that makes you wonder about people. Keep writing, babe, I love this stuff.
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coolvamp007 [2006-06-07 05:13:57 +0000 UTC]
Ian... as always, your writing RULES! You cant imagine how much I liked your deviation because it made me think in one "best friend" I have right now. I feel exactly like Will sometimes (except for the fact that im not a fag that is sexually abused by his gym teacher).
+fav!!!
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n-o-u-n [2006-06-07 03:18:04 +0000 UTC]
It's perfect for the apocalypse.
Excellent story. Great idea, and well written out.
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patukumchan [2006-06-07 02:37:49 +0000 UTC]
Holy shit. That...... was just as sweet as the antifreeze. *two thumbs up*
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MyChemicalPixie [2006-06-07 01:51:38 +0000 UTC]
Nicely done, Ian! I enjoyed reading this! *thumbsup* GOOD JOB, I LIKE IT A LOT!!
*big hugs* I misssed yoooou..!!!
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Cuillioc [2006-06-07 00:52:55 +0000 UTC]
Excellent work. Sweet ending.
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Rainbowriffic [2006-06-06 23:45:00 +0000 UTC]
That is so true about seventh grade. One moment you're someone's best friend and when you return to school they've been adopted into some group and hate you because the kids that are making them popular hate you...
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empty-phantom [2006-06-06 23:42:24 +0000 UTC]
Revenge is truly sweet. And its a best dish served cold, ice cold. ^-^.
I love this story, tis amazing. I always love your writing.
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LostDot [2006-06-06 23:10:37 +0000 UTC]
I love it. 8D
The ending is great. xD;
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kimosa [2006-06-06 23:01:11 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Nice little twist at the end. Made me read it again. I think theres one or two grammatical errors. But its pretty awesome (:
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sissismay [2006-06-06 22:59:46 +0000 UTC]
haha that is great.
sweet revenge.
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imaginaryending [2006-06-06 22:54:37 +0000 UTC]
holy crap!!!!!!!! 0_0
first i was all like... "awwww thats so sweet"
and then i was like... "DAMN that kid knows his stuff!"
lol! this was totally awesome. Kinda frightful, but totally awesome none the less.
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son-of-khaos [2006-06-06 22:42:00 +0000 UTC]
hehehe... dont give me any ideas...
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Cu-Ifrinn [2006-06-06 21:24:21 +0000 UTC]
Rock on! It's awsome!! No work? If I could write like that with no effort...wow...
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oyf-brodie [2006-06-06 20:52:12 +0000 UTC]
Wow. That is effing awesome. Nice delivery, not too obvious, and very well written.
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A-Silenced-Heart [2006-06-06 20:40:25 +0000 UTC]
haha aw ian i love the title
BRILLIANT
aw fun times kiddo
psh you and your krazy awesome writing
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