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Published: 2005-07-29 17:57:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 1547; Favourites: 29; Downloads: 103
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My beating heart was all,For you.
I picked up the phone to call,
And you made me smile the way you do.
I held my pillow close,
And choked it 'til it was blue.
But it was just a substitute,
For you.
I fluttered in the sky,
Last night.
I soared beyond the sun's reply,
And everything was very right.
You held me in your arms;
You kept my body through the night.
I was only yours,
Last night.
I'll always want to hold,
Your hand.
Then even when we're old,
You'll still be sure that I'm your man.
The only one I need,
The only one who'll understand,
Is painting hearts on boxers with,
Your hand.
My empty heart's been filled,
By you.
My butterflies are thrilled,
With all the feelings that you put them through.
I need you in my arms,
To show you what I mean is true.
I just want to be,
By you.
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Comments: 53
amazing o_o i usually don't read poems.BUT this is an exception, you're so talented ^^
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.smooooches you. I love your work. You're such a talented writer, and I always smooch the best.
"My butterflies are thrilled,
With all the feelings that you put them through."
Butterflies, the one thing everyone says love is. You make it sound more than just the old saying of it, that's so wonderful!
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It is such a lovely poem.
Love the feeling, the rhythm, everything.
Great as usual Ian.
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i really really like your poems they are so sweet. I admire the love you two have....good job, i think it's amazing how happy and beautiful your poetry is
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i havent read your stuff in a while... it seems to have changed... i love it... not love but aspire to it as a writer and as someone who is sharing your emotions... i love the pillow the idea, the way you wrote it... its like it came staight from your hands no thinking... i mean im sure you read it but the words dont alter the emotion but enhance it... it has a natural flow... i guess i might like it...
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awww I think I'm going to cry that is so beautiful!
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One poet to another, this is beauitful. It is well wrote and with every line, you can feel the emotion.
Well Done
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This was so breathtaking, i'm still trying to get the use of my lungs back. I love your writing, it really comes from the heart ----> 
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Oh my god, I'm trembling, I love this!!! Oh butterflies! *Has a facination with the sensation of butterflies*
You are officially my fav poet on DA!
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You continue to amaze me with your ability to write the sweetest, most touching love poems without being trite. I love the nifty rhyme scheme too.
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aaaww you're so sweet!! i love the way you love azu!! jaja.. you're so cuuteeee!! i'm in love with your poems..!!i love reading them..I'm from Argentina and i can't speak english very well but i understand them perfectly because.. i think..love speak one languaje!! :d
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Great work yet again! Gawsh. You're one of the best poets evar. :3 Keep up the AWESOME work.
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omg that was so nice of you
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sweet poem! ^^
I fluttered in the sky,
Last night.
I soared beyond the sun's reply,
And everything was very right.
these lines are so pretty!
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Thanks...I put make up on them just before I did their hair! so theyre pretty sure ian shuddup :-/
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Adorable piece and I really love the title. It obviously means a lot to you personally (as all your poems do, straight from the heart I can tell) I only wish that when I bared my soul on paper it looked that good.
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Ahhh this is sooooo sweet, like always. The way you put love into words...it's just so beautiful.
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in every piece of your writing you can feel the emotion in it (i think thats how you spell it) 
LAMA
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I really must kill you and steal your talent I swear. 
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*sob of joy*
Oh Ian, your poetry should be put into a book and then the book should be put in some home for suicidal people and they'll be so happy and inspired after reading it that they'll never ever want to die because your writing makes them so happppyyyy. Because its soo ccuuuute and fuzzy and full of joviality. Yay! I personally prefer writing the sad poems because I want to keep my happiness to myself and I dont want to waste it on paper. [Hehe, I'm selfish] And cute poem by the way. I like this line the best!
I held my pillow close,
And choked it 'til it was blue.
But it was just a substitute,
For you.
And choked it till it was blue. Gotta be the cutest thing Ive ever heard.
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Arent I adooorable :-B
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Aw! *squeal* Yes you are! *pinches cheek* >__>
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'My butterflies are thrilled,
With all the feelings that you put them through.'
LOVE those lines!
If only everyone could feel like you could! the world would be such a beautiful colourful place!!!!!!!
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That's true...but then everyone would be in love with my boyfriend and I would have to go into a deep dark depression or commit mass muuurdeerrrrr
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that was awesome!! i don't know why though i feel a little depressed after reading it...
i want butterflies
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*opens mouth and releases some butterflies for you*
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awwww tanks!!!! 
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i love it. i reeally wish i could write like you do. so sweet.
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I like the theme of things being fufilled. (Im prolly the only one who noticed it, and you prolly didnt even put it in that way 
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omg nnnnnnnnng. i love how the commas and new lines break up the flow of some of th phrases so you have to like read it twice to soak it in. : D i reaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaally like this one, love. *prints it out and puts it on my corkboard with the others* <3
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