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Admantina — Alone
Published: 2008-09-28 00:55:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 2208; Favourites: 52; Downloads: 6
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In her room, there isNo such thing as popularity
As homework or grades
Or Ivy League schools.
Boys are just boys
And beauty means nothing.
In her room, there is
Only her.
And she feels like she
Belongs.
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Comments: 28
I usually dont like short poems i dont think they can involve a story and emotion that well but you proved me wrong and made me feel thank you
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SUPER CRITIC! (I haven't done this in awhile so I hope this is okay x.x)
The first stanza implies the female is tired of everything relating to people and school
The second stanza makes it seem like her room is the only safe place from everything mentioned in stanza one
And finally the third stanza makes it sound like the female felt out of place or inside her she feels that she is even though she isn't from someone else's perspective, either one, to her she feels lonely =]
"In her room, this is/ Only her."
The word "this" makes it sound kind of awkward, respectively
Overall this poem was done very well =]
I like the message of this poem and how it is set up to convey it
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Yay, super critic! This is really random, but it was kind of funny how you kept referring to her as the female. XD Still, glad you liked it.
And I'll go change that - it was a typo. It's supposed to be "there"
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I like this one because it's short and means a lot, alonea world that I am familiar with.
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Short and sweet
Thank you.
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Yep, I think that I also wrote a poem about alone. In my view of course. Check it if you like. 
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it is original, the only thing not original is ur title! XD! lol, u dont wanna mislead ppl into thinking its just like the rest u know!, doesnt have to be more imaginative, only more indepth XD!
and i dont really know about this 100 themes challenge.
and np XD!
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i love all your works, although i have one small bit of criticism...your titles. for one thing, something as common as alone has over 100 hits here on deviantart. i dunno how to explain, but ur gonna have to find a way to make ur titles less general.
o.O, i forgot i changed the titles to mine too
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XD I just checked and there's over 400k.
So yeah.. I'm really not that original. But this one was for the 100 themes challenge, so I like to make them more or less the same as whatever theme I'm doing.
I'll try and make my titles more imaginative in the future though. Thanks
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very nice poem. Very basic, but that's good. It's a basic experience, so it shouldn't be cluttered with long and winding words.
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Thank you
I tried my best to capture the moment - I guess I succeeded.
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That is great as it is. It really describes what a teenager thinks sometimes.
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I like that there's no rhyme scheme- it feels very loose, almost like a straight stream of thoughts. It's a great feeling to release into a poem. 
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Thank you, I wrote it pretty sincerely in a moment of randomness.
I'm glad you like it.
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It's powerful for a short poem. I like how you end it, very...crisp, maybe? XD I'm terrible at describing things.
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Thanks! 
When you wrote crisp, I looked at your display picture and jut laughed.
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Very nice
Especially for your first time
This is how when I'm reading
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Thank you. 
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I like it.
Because I think it is a sort of common human experience, right? Feeling safer and away from pressure in you room.
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PS. I don't think I am the Eva you know?
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Thanks.
o.o I know an Eva just like you. But AHHH XD maybe not. My bad.
Nice-to-meet-you.
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Haha! Nice to meet you too. ^_^
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interesting... im not sure how to put my comments in words.. maybe i'll figure it out when my brain is fuctioning properly XD
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