Tuishimi [2005-06-13 23:21:08 +0000 UTC]
Had to go to your first, posted poem. I love what the poem says. I don't know it it is what you were aiming for but you have a number of lines that are Iambic and then a mix of Dactyl as well. So there is a rhythm, but sometimes it is lost in the line length. The last two stanzas are very nice and I felt emotion welling up quickly... before I squelched it.
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Admytica In reply to Tuishimi [2005-06-14 09:27:52 +0000 UTC]
hey, thanks I think there were parts of this that I wanted to show off, certain lines I wanted in it, and I just fitted the rest two those lines... that's why it'a s bit mixed. I think I would've written it differently if I had written it today. but I like it nonetheless And I'm glad you do too!
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Libahunt [2004-10-21 20:35:30 +0000 UTC]
This is simply wonderful. Gonna say something more when I'm a bit more awake
Luvya9876 [2004-10-21 07:21:14 +0000 UTC]
I realized I had welcomed you to DA but I didn't actually look at your gallery! so sorry. I like this poem a lot! very vivid and hits a person on such an emotional level. Great job!
Admytica In reply to Luvya9876 [2004-10-21 11:20:34 +0000 UTC]
hehe, thanks, both of you I actually don't think this poem was out when you visited, because it was the last thing I did before I logged off
Luvya9876 In reply to Admytica [2004-10-21 17:47:53 +0000 UTC]
*whew*
MisterIngo [2004-10-20 20:11:53 +0000 UTC]
Dette var kjempebra! *translator* This was great!* God natt! *good night* Mister Ingo