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aishwaryajain — Whisper on me
Published: 2006-03-03 12:23:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 423; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 5
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Upon the touch of an eye,Fair eye,
A million drops pour
A million drops cold,
Stars descend down to dwell,
As a million miles roll,
A million thoughts unfold,
And the blessing of love-
Everlasting Joy
And the comfort of life-
Eternal Ploy
....The dancing rain and the hushed pain..
Oh whisper on me the life that remains,
With the flight so steep and laughter insane,
Oh whisper on me the life that remains,
....Whisper on me your life that remains..
And the essense of life-
Pure Bliss
And the renewed strife-
Shallow Abyss
..And the far away steps to the dark black home,
Not tiresome, not lonely, not all alone..
..In the dancing rain, with the hushed pain,
Oh whisper on me the life that remains,
Oh whisper on me, your life that remains..
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Comments: 15
Absolutely crazy about the line: Oh whisper on me the life that remains. Just loved it.
The pome is great (I'm a bit of a romantic, though you could never detect that from the bloody pomes I write).
And loved your reply to silentskream's comment.
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I like this
I can almost hear an accoustic rendition... i think it'll make a powerful song. Good job here
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wow...i think i'm seeing a little tear falling from my eye...it's lovely..
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Its very wel written though I would like to know what exactly you mean by"whisper on me life that remains".Seems like a song to me.Creates a meloncholy mood of some sort.Thanks for the mention there
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thanks, tis not melonchony(sp?) at all..tis a love song.. whisper on me means that whatever part of your life is left, gently bestow me with it.. when i see you, i see the ocean filled with the water of your love.. i see love in your eyes bright as the stars that see ur together.. and i can move on forever like this, and i can understand all thats here.. coz the rain is pourin and ive forgotten my pains.. if only you give me the part of your life left..as you fly so high and laugh so gay, take me with you, for the rest of ur day.. for everytime i fight, i fall so i can climb, and when i die, ill not be alone, for your love will accompany me.. so bestow on me the life thats left..
lolz, thats sad?? and np, you got me writing thank you
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thats amazing.The comment can be a deviation itself.
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lolz, yeah it rhymed too much, lolz
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