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Some new pages. I decided that maybe it's better to upload the pages a bit less often but more of them? I don't know...let me know what you think!
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The rain makes the gallows look even scarier.
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Did you use the guiding lines we were talking about for the stairs? Because they're really well done perspective-wise (except maybe the step on which Sebastian is standing which is a bit... wobbly, it's puzzling that this one isn't as good because you did all the other steps perfectly!)
While on the subject (I must be so obnoxious to pester you with thatΒ ) I think one of the reasons you struggle with perspective is that your diagonals are too slanted. You shouldn't be afraid to keep them closer to the horizontal. Also, when you have several lines close together, try to keep them fairly parallel to each other, just doing that can go a long way. Also, for the third panel, unless you're like me and you use a 'fish eye' to draw, you generally won't see both the floor and the ceiling at an angle where it is very visible, there's always one that you'll see almost in profile. Just doing that would reduce the distortions.
Yeah, I don't know if I'm clear enough, and since a quick sketch is worth a thousand words:
I've highlighted all the horizontal lines, as you can see, you can make them so on all the side that's directly facing you. For the second sketch, as you can see, the ceiling is almost horizontal as well.
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I did try! But as I said, perspective is really difficult for me. I try to use the lines, but I have such a hard time choosing the point where hey're supposed to converge...and I never know if I should use one, or two points!Β
Oh, no do pester. I honestly think my perspective is improving slightlyΒ at least, thanks to what you say. And thank you so much for that reconstruction! It's really helpful!!! I wish, I could do this as well as you!!! But now I will have something to study to see where I went wrong!Β
Also, thanks for that tip about the diagonals! I see what you mean! Honestly this is great help!!Β
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Well he just follows his gut feeling most of the time. Luckily his gut feelings are generallly quite good!Β
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Wow I love the colours you chose for the gaol, it really looks miserable and also almost finite in a way. Also the shadow of the noose looming is a great panel in reminding the reader of the weight of the place. I love the little smudge on the moon, it's interesting to see a different phase of it portrayed aside from the usual full moon or crescent so often seen in art
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Ah, thank you! I'm afraid my dungeons are always a bit to green...but I like the eerie effect. Glad the moon works ok, the idea to make the one side blurry was a bit of a strange one...
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I actually like the fuzzy edge of the moon, that's kind of what it looks like in reality (to me anyway, but then again my eyesight is poor so I could be mistaken and it's actually a smooth edge in real life!). Either way the fact you tried something new is a success
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As someone who spends a lot of time being aware of the moon, there is nothing wrong with your portrayal- it's just that the moon would be waning rather than waxing (about day five, I think) - which come to think of it quite fits in with the mood. It quite often happens that you can see the moon clearly, even when it's raining, if the storm is passing or just beginning to sweep over . But what a scene, that cell with the moonlight pouring in about to be extinguished and left in the dark...
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Ah, I'm glad to hear that! I did think it makes sense. But then I started to doubt myself.Β
I'm glad the scene works. I imagine even in the rare cases without torture and cruel guards, pre-modern prisons must have been absolutely terrible places...
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Funny, but just at the moment I am writing the scene ( in' Hare') where Mother Bishop is imprisoned in just such a place. Imagine dripping water, foul straw underfoot and the sounds of rats scurrying. In absolute darkness. ( she manages to escape , of course)
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Ah so the Hare story will continue?! Wonderful! As always, Iβm VERY eager to read!
Actually I remember reading that the darkness and lack of hope of release was the main torture in medieval prisons. People would become absolutely desperate in days and would often start giving information just to be out of there.
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I'm hoping to come to the end soon! Of course you may read it when it is done- would you prefer to get chapter by chapter as we have done? I'm on chapter five but there ought to be at least one more after that. It's my first try at multiple points of view and I would value your opinion!
Yes, for some reason I seem to be dealing with medieval prisons a lot lately- there's another story in the collection that opens in one.Β Horrible places, to be sure, not that any prison, in any age, is ideal.
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Well, I do enjoy reading chapter by chapter. Lets me take things in better. I noticed that when I read too quickly - which is often- I tend to remember just the general jist...Iβm reading a pretty exciting historical book at the moment and Iβm taking it soow on purpose (actually forcing myself to put it down after each sub-chapter and start again the next day, because otherwise I would read it too quickly and would forget half of it...
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Since you've read the first chapter, I'll send just the first two, if that's OK- I'm sort of editing as I go along so there might have been some changes.
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That first panel is a wonderful way to set the dark and ominous mood, showing the gallows on a rainy night. And it looks beautiful too with the string bright outlines. And I love the way you made the moonlight in the panel with the cell and the prisoners. They look so sad and wretched with their dejected poses and dirty feet, and so does the prisoner with his bruised face, he looks resigned with his fate. No wonder he is so taken aback that someone like Sebastian would care about him and try to save him!
Also, I also noticed how the guard speaks respectfully about the prisoners - it takes a kind man not to advise his position over people doomed for the gallows.
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Thank you so much! I wasn't sure if it's a good idea to add an empty panel like this but in the end I thought it would create the mood nicely! And I'm so glad that the prisoners panel reads like this! I really wanted to create a sense of dirt, dejectedness and sadness. But I don't usually draw stuff like that so I wasn't sure it will work.Β
Ah yes, Ebell is a really friendly guy. Though he's also being a bit humorous calling them 'gentlemen' and 'ladies' - obviously no one else thinks of them that way...
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Thanks so much for checking it out! You're right I guess. I didn't think of it. Sebastian is supposed to be the sort of guy who easily forgets wrongs done to him....whether he will stay that way is another matter.Β
In terms of power he's not that much more powerful yet. Young vampires in my world aren't that much different from humans. The powers grow gradually. And there are sometimes big 'leaps' in ability after important events etc. But Seb hasn't had one yet. So he's only slightly stronger than a regular human being. But he is much more...durable (like his sire).Β
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Well physically he's quite used to it by now and it feels 'normal' for him. He's still not a great fan of drinking blood though and REALLY misses the sun.Β
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OMG! The upper panel with the gallow and the outline of the city in the rain looks awesome! The rain in the moonlight looks beautifull and the gallow is daunting /scary - excellent work! Also, I like the design of the prison guard and the way he refers to the respectful way in which he refers to the prisoners - his name was Ebel right? He seems very likeable!
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So glad you like it! I was pretty happy with it!Β
Yes, this is Ebell. Well, I thought that his way of speaking about the prisoners is supposed to be polite but also a bit humorous - you know referring to a chained up guy as a 'gentleman'...
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Nitpicking time! 
P.S.: Yay, new pages!
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ah you're right!! I didn't notice that! Ugh, I should go and correct it!Β
Hm, as for the moon, yeah, exactly it was supposed to suggest that it's not full moon yet...I thought making it blurry would work in an interesting way, but maybe a sharper shape would look better.Β
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