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indiana-w [2010-02-12 02:44:23 +0000 UTC]
You tell a good story, Alec.
New things are always birthed with pain.
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Poetrymann [2010-02-09 02:29:07 +0000 UTC]
This is superb.
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AlecBell In reply to Poetrymann [2010-02-09 07:38:23 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Brendan.
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Blueskye27 [2010-02-07 13:19:12 +0000 UTC]
The magic of the dance - you've created an image of unspoken history that's very powerful. Nicely done.
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Blueskye27 In reply to AlecBell [2010-02-08 01:18:39 +0000 UTC]
There's so, so much sadness in all that history; it's nice that you give them another voice.
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AlecBell In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-02-08 07:04:47 +0000 UTC]
The other poem was so harsh, even I found it disturbing!
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spoems [2010-02-07 02:25:48 +0000 UTC]
That last stanza is hypnotic in meter and imagery. Well done.
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TriciaS [2010-02-05 20:49:12 +0000 UTC]
Hypnotic drum rhythms must have made so much difference to their lives...a chance to dream and forget their misery !I love this part....
......."Our desires dance for us,desires that flower in dreams.
Long sugarcane days of labour fade"
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rlkirkland [2010-02-05 19:08:00 +0000 UTC]
Products from mature thought processes are a nice change of pace here.
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Trippy4U [2010-02-05 15:45:48 +0000 UTC]
This is a must read for all.
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AlecBell In reply to Trippy4U [2010-02-05 16:06:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Richard.
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W-Uno [2010-02-05 15:08:38 +0000 UTC]
This is truly a piece of haunting images and spectral pain, Alec. I love it.
The second stanza, for me, is particularly beautiful.
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AlecBell In reply to W-Uno [2010-02-05 15:22:53 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Greg.
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Mini-Magpie [2010-02-05 14:30:24 +0000 UTC]
The imagery in this is fantasitc =]
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PrettyCrazy [2010-02-05 09:04:09 +0000 UTC]
I love the sounds of it, the subtle rhymes.
A few typos regarding capitals, perhaps: verse 1, line 5 and verse 2, line 6?
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AlecBell In reply to PrettyCrazy [2010-02-05 09:15:51 +0000 UTC]
Thanks very much.
Your typo spotting is much appreciated. All corrected now.
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