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Description "But, what you suggest is desecration!
That we should intrude upon her resting place
as though we were no better than the most
                         wretched of body snatchers!

"How can you propose so despicable a scheme?
I did the poor woman too much wrong while
yet she lived. How should I disinter her from
                                                      her grave?

"And yet, Gabriel, the dead always sleep soundly,
no matter who disturbs their bed.

"And were she with us still, is there
any sacrifice that she would not make for you?

We shall act as gently as angels,
I shall organise everything. I shall see
that she is treated with the greatest of respect."

Henry, I can't bear to listen, say no more.
Were not the poems as it were a final gift?
How can I cause the soil to be clawed away
to reclaim what I have already dedicated
                                                       to her?"

2
"I managed to persuade Gabriel that
what I said was true, in spite
of the séances he took
his aching conscience to.  You,
of course, judge me too. But I
loved the man, I loved his art,
how could I stand by and let him,
as a poet and a painter, die,
while hollow eyed, his ghost
still lived among us? He had
even started to believe that his
eyes were failing him.

No, I regret nothing. When I restored
his poems, I restored his life. Let  
who will revile me. Let us hope, when
tested, that they love their friends
                          as selflessly as I!"


"To be sure that there could be
no scandal, we did the work in Highgate
Cemetery at the dead of night. With me
I carried a warrant signed by
the Home Secretary himself. None
could question us. I found a gang
of hardy lads, who could be tempted
by a silencing of gold. I set them on

"Have care, " I cried. "We must leave
as little trace as miracles do." I told them
that the opening of the coffin was for me alone.

"I found the book still whole, with pages
still turnable. With gloved hands, I packed
it in a sack. The lads were quick to restore
the scene. I paid them well."


3

"My God, I was heartsick when he returned
those buried pages to me. He wove a
pretty story round that gruesome night.
He told me that her copper tresses
had never ceased to grow. I wept.

"Yet I transcribed them all. Now
the book that had contained the poems
is destroyed. As for Henry, I cannot
say that I can any longer enjoy
his company. I believe that
we try to avoid each other.
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Comments: 25

SirBret [2009-12-24 11:19:18 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact


Certainly one of the better pieces I've read on dA, I was as intrigued by it as I am by some of my favourite authors. I particularly enjoy your technique of starting halfway through a conversation. Long introductions do not hold as much interest for me, and to begin so boldly, especially with such an obscure story is commendable in my books.

One difficulty with the piece is clarity. Upon first reading, it is difficult to distinguish between who is whom, especially since I have approached this story with little knowledge of Rossetti. After reading a wiki on him, it appears to make more sense. I don't condone creating complicated, outer-referential pieces - I enjoy them - but it would help to clarify the initial distinction between Henry and Gabriel somehow. How you do that is up to you, I suppose!

The last stanza wasn't as impactive as I thought it might be, considering the brilliant dramatic monologue throughout 1 and 2. Perhaps rounding it off with a nice two-line statement would make this poem appear to be more complete.

And finally, consistency with speech marks - especially in part 1. You may need to just check it over, as this may have been the source of my confusion over the narrative voice.

What I do like about this piece is that the reader has to work their brain in order to understand it, and that it is based around a key point in Rossetti's life. It's almost an homage to Rossetti, at least indirectly, and I am glad you wrote it - I enjoyed it very much.

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AlecBell In reply to SirBret [2009-12-24 12:53:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

It probaly reads easier if you have read The Death Of Lizzie Sindal and Beatrice Beata. The poems form a chronological sequence.

I often use anti climactic endings, feeling that they are (in narrative subjects such as these) closer to lived experience.

I shall look again at the quatation marks.

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SirBret In reply to AlecBell [2009-12-25 16:17:35 +0000 UTC]

Since the poem is part of a chronological set, it makes more sense to have an anti-climatic ending to this one - I read them all through and thoroughly enjoyed them.

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AlecBell In reply to SirBret [2009-12-26 00:39:26 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. There are still two more tocome!

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SirBret In reply to AlecBell [2009-12-29 12:49:07 +0000 UTC]

I look forward to them! Now I have some good literature to follow on dA, that makes me happy.

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AlecBell In reply to SirBret [2009-12-29 21:07:14 +0000 UTC]

I shall do best to ensure you are not disappointed.

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melodythelittlepony [2010-01-03 10:42:35 +0000 UTC]

What an appalling, frightening thought... What a sacrifice! To disturb the body of the one he loved, after all that had passed, to retrieve the poems, at the persuasion of another.

You've captured Rossetti's feelings perfectly, I think. It was an exhilarating read.

The whole strange scenario could be something from 'Wuthering Heights'!

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AlecBell In reply to melodythelittlepony [2010-01-03 18:07:19 +0000 UTC]

It is more like fiction that wht we imagine real life to consist of, but so thoroughly documented!!!

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Piscesandthediamonds [2009-12-30 21:33:59 +0000 UTC]

"We must leave
as little trace as miracles do


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AlecBell In reply to Piscesandthediamonds [2009-12-30 23:49:10 +0000 UTC]

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YouInventedMe [2009-12-29 05:33:17 +0000 UTC]

the ending is my favorite part. thanks for the links to the previous parts, it definitely helps the reading.

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AlecBell In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-12-29 08:38:44 +0000 UTC]

Pleased you enjoyed them, Shane.

There were will be more to come (There were two more women in Rossetti's life.)

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TriciaS [2009-12-28 18:18:40 +0000 UTC]

As I love Pre- Raphaelite art I read your poem and then read the 1st and 2nd poems....I found them all totally riveting! They were so beautifully written.....and so sad!

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AlecBell In reply to TriciaS [2009-12-28 22:05:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

It might have seemed to Rossetti (sometimes, at least.) that his art really could transcend the reality he held in such contempt.

But his dream world seems to have been too insubstantial to embody any thing but a pale form of hope.

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TriciaS In reply to AlecBell [2009-12-29 15:04:33 +0000 UTC]

Are most poets dreamers,do you think?

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AlecBell In reply to TriciaS [2009-12-29 21:05:56 +0000 UTC]

Dreaming is an essential ingredient in creativity.

Some dreamers are better able than others, perhaps, to negotiate between private fantasy and intersubjective reality.

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spoems [2009-12-28 05:58:10 +0000 UTC]

so fascinating! you really have expanded my poetic sensibilities, Alec. thanks for always sharing your best.

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AlecBell In reply to spoems [2009-12-28 12:31:21 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for more of your ever-generous comments, Shane.

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skyeconnelly [2009-12-28 03:04:04 +0000 UTC]

This is brilliant.

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AlecBell In reply to skyeconnelly [2009-12-28 12:30:47 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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skyeconnelly In reply to AlecBell [2009-12-28 16:40:46 +0000 UTC]

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MistakenMagic [2009-12-27 20:43:41 +0000 UTC]

Love the structure of this one Alec!

Erin xxx

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AlecBell In reply to MistakenMagic [2009-12-28 12:30:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Erin, bery much.

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Satah [2009-12-27 09:05:24 +0000 UTC]

ah, i adore those last two lines (:

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AlecBell In reply to Satah [2009-12-28 12:30:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, Satah.

There will be more soon (ish)

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