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Published: 2016-01-10 15:07:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 6931; Favourites: 57; Downloads: 0
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Ladies and gentlemen. I here by give you TAJS first "Oh Shit" moment. You now have permition to say... "Oh Shit!" :3
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Oooooooo Look! its my favorite soda! OIL 
(my OC is a animatronic so yeah :/ ....you know FNaF,Five night at freddy :/)
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dont you mean ASS-assination i regret nothing
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No, The war was already started when Bob broke out from prison.
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Oh, I didn't even notice that. I am gonna fix that when I get the time. Thanks.
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Alex. Plz nu. I hope that the feel train isn't going to crash.
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What did he smell?
I bet he just smelled a viking after all day's work! *Yooo* *Badum-Pss*
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Awesome beard on the awaters.
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Thanks. Are there any other grammar errors? Because I was really tired when I wrote the comic. XD
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In panel 7, have "Of course I don't mind, love" instead of "Of course not love", so that it doesn't sound like you can't wait until morning, and the placement of the comma.
Panel 8: add the question mark after "do you smell that"
Panel 11: It might be better to replace "again" with "though", though that is just my preference.
Panel 12: "It's okay, Alex." add a comma between your name and the rest of the sentence.
Side note: I noticed that everything in the last panel is just a few pixels higher up than in the previous panel. My first clue was the flammable sign becoming more visible.
Just wanted to point that out.
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ok thanks. And the last panel is because of the Blurr effect that I put on it.
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Couldn't say it better myself.
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"gas can?..... gas can...." *processes* "nope only got the idea of roasted marshmallows .3." been waiting for these to come up again! awesome work keep it up.
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FIRE !!! BUUUUUURN XD
yeah yeah. sweet sweet gasoline ^^
oh shit ^^
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Where's the download button I can't read it
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What are you using? A phone or a computer?
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My comics are more ment to be seen on Computers. And I don't really wanna let people download a full version of the comic due to stealing and art theft. :c
But if you have a chance to be at a computer, you will see it just fine.
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I'm always via phone
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Well... then there is nothing I can really do. Sorry. :c
My comics are more ment to be seen on computers. T_T
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I cant see anything on a phone. Fuck8ng quality D:
Why i cant download and see it in HD?
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Because I don't have them on download becuse of safety.
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D: ooohh what a bad luck. I cant see on android D: i guess i have to watch it on a pc
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well. Tks for replying. It was hard to see on android but i did it 
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Oh, than you better keep an eye on Goldie. We don't want her getting hurt. Do we?
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Not at all. I would never let anyone hurt my little coke. ;w;
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^^ Than you better watch out for her after she comes back from the bar!
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