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alexmerquise — DP: Marceline full bio
Published: 2011-11-18 00:17:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 1996; Favourites: 39; Downloads: 58
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Here it is! Marceline's full bio. I began working on this for at least a few weeks. It took that long because of the stuff I had to come up with for her and revision over revision in order to make her as believable as possible. I even had to cram in some stuff from my fanfiction, so it kinda has some spoilers.Please excuse the amount of info on here since I'm a stickler for detail. This bio is a prototype, so I'm open for any suggestions as the title said.
EDITED: I made the background darker so it wouldn't be a strain to read the bio. Darkened the picture box as well so the outer glow would be obvious.
EDIT 2: Changed font to make reading easier.
EDIT 3: Got advice from transformer-wannabe and dulled the bright golden parts of the cavalry uniform a little. I also revamped the bio a little: took out the weapon-like properties of necktie for sentimental value since it seemed a bit redundant, and will most likely be left unused anyway. Added some stuff in the background story.
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awesome OC, i don't have anny time now so i'll read her bio later
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First off I must say I really like her design and now that I understand what it means I like it all the more. Her human form definitely looks british which is a nifty that you could pull it off. I also love her hair style very original in both forms not to plain and not to over the top nice balance there. I'm really impressed with your handle on the DP style you drew her really well.
Hmm you know what it's really late at night where I am. I think it would be better for me to critique this when I am more awake 
Fantastic job either I think she's probably up there with some of my favorite DP OCs I've seen thus far
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I'm glad you liked it. To be honest, I was never shooting for any particular look other than casual yet somewhat dignified. When I was done, I only saw her as normal, not British.
Also, thanks for offering. That will be most helpful.
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1: This is VERY hard to read. 
2:You said she was an embryo created by a scientist in the human world, but somehow she ends up in the Ghost Zone, and in a technologically impaired time era? It doesn't make sense. Could you clarify?
3: Does time move faster in Fiddler's Green? For every 1 year in our time, is it 10 years in their's? (Just making sure.)
4: As for everything else, I think it's fine. The story is extremely original for the DP fandom, the art is GORGEOUS, and she's got equally balanced good and bad attributes. (Not to mention, her design is adorable. 
5: I'm not the best at critiques.
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1: Sorry about that. I wanted to make it bigger, but there wasn't enough room in the background. And it was already around 2500x2400 size.
2: The scientist who created her lived in Fiddler's Green--a spirit nation which like a lower level of heaven. If you want to know the basic definition, check out my story in my gallery. You can't miss it, it's the only written deviation there. I'll have an in-depth explanation of what spirit nations are when I upload a written entry about it. It will be done soon enough. Also, yay for anachronism(if you catch my drift)!
3: Yes.
4 and 5: Thank you for the compliment. And I'll keep that advice in mind. I'm working out the kinks in the bio as I'm typing this, and I really need expert feedback to make it work.
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1: Something that might help is putting the full bio in the artist's comments too.
2: So is this scientist a human or a ghost? If he's a ghost, is he die in the Fiddler's Green time era or the modern era? Is he just a random man who's only purpose in the story was to create Marceline?
Oh yeah anachronism
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Actually, the scientist is also a reaper (or 'shinigami' if you prefer a more popular term), or at least he was until he got thrown out into the GZ. Fiddler's Green is nowhere on Earth. It is however, a kind of imagined afterlife--like heaven in our beliefs--hidden in a pocket dimension in the Ghost Zone. No, he isn't some random character. He is someone we know, but to maintain suspense, I'll keep him anonymous.
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I guess it's safe to say that I'm trying to go for a crossover that at the same time, "not" a crossover. Does that make any sense? Also, it kinda bothered me in some Bleach crossover fics where the setting is in a country other than Japan, and the Japanese reapers seem to manage the souls there as well, so I decided to make a fic like Reaper Chronicles. I also wanted to incorporate a deeper exploration of the afterlife that includes other planes of existence such as Heaven, Hell, etc.--something DP didn't get to show.
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I can see what you are going there. 
I have reaper Ocs too but my Reapers don't even know if those souls go to those places or somewhere else. I wanna leave out the concept that there is a heaven or hell (I'm Catholic, btw). Because some of my reapers (That I'm still making) are coming from different religions or have no religion.
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(xxxholic perhaps?)
My reapers aren't exactly religious either, but they know there are existing places of reward and punishment for the souls that deserve it. They also know that there's an omnipotent force in the universe responsible for its creation, but they don't see or regard it as an entity or worship it for that matter. I'm going to take a neutral stand and not involve any religion at all; just sticking to the basic good, bad, and anything else in between.
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(Yeah, maybe I should get rid of that part.) 
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As I said before, I like her. But I notice a lot of things comes similar to Bleach. The Reaper School, the names for her weapons, and the soul doll. 
Also the fact she is living with Danny reminds me about Rukia living with Ichigo.
I'm not really critiquing just pointing the similarities of her world and the Bleach world.
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True, I did mention at the first chapter of the fic she's in that the story would have some Bleach elements in it. As much as I would like to have an alternative, I couldn't think of anything else. One of the differences I made between it and Bleach is that my reapers come with different types of weapons that serve as their "scythes" instead of just one common type.
If you have suggestions please let me know.
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I really like the different types of weapons idea.
I'm not the best person to give critiques.
But for some reason her living with Danny strikes me thinking, why all of a sudden? How did she make Danny's family actually believe her story? Because if a random person comes up to my door for an example saying I've sign up as an exchange student and you are my host family. I will go WTF when did I sign for this? Also when did she require the Soul Doll? (If this is mention in the story put it in the bio).
As I said before I'm not the best person to give critique.
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Sorry, I really fail. How does a school international exchange program work anyway? Does one or all family members sign up to host somebody?
I really need to recheck this.
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I had a classmate that sign up for exchange student to France and one to China too. The way I think it works is that you sign up and fill up an application form. You choose the country you want to go too and they see if their is also someone from that country that is applying to come to your country.
You live with the person and their family for the semester and the next semester they go live with you and your family in the other semester. I think that is how it goes down but double check to make sure.
I think you have to sign up to host, but I think your family have to be inform about it. Their are information meetings and everything.
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