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ALostMind β€” No More.
Published: 2009-02-01 05:00:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 99; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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Description Skeletons…

Their weeps and moans fill my head.
Their cries make me twist and turn in my bed.
Their touch is shivering; it will turn you to stone.
They will make you the biggest coward you’ve ever know.

Open your door, you will meet their eyes.
There will be everything you fear, everything that dies.
They will drag you in and make you know.
That this is something that will show.

Come our bloodstained, and close the door.
This insanity you will take no more.
You scream out your lies, your crimes, and lusts.
The closet door will burst open, and there they will be.
The skeletons. Finally free.
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ALostMind - Life Long Sleep
Comments: 13

phillGH [2009-02-01 13:23:32 +0000 UTC]

You scream out your lies, your crimes, and lusts.

that line kinda just seemed thrown in their...i mean it didn't ryhme with anything and seemed kinda random

Open your door, you will meet their eyes.

skeletons have eyes?

overall fine VARY GUD

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ALostMind In reply to phillGH [2009-02-01 22:22:45 +0000 UTC]

It was thrown in there to kind of tie it up, and they gave a dark gaze, they have eye sockets don't they? you can meet that dark gaze, cant you?
And thanks

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phillGH In reply to ALostMind [2009-02-01 23:06:37 +0000 UTC]

that have eye sockets...but not eyes!

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ALostMind In reply to phillGH [2009-02-02 03:42:54 +0000 UTC]

shhh XD

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B00KAH0LIC [2009-02-01 05:16:30 +0000 UTC]

That's really nice. I like the way the poem moves. Great job!

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ALostMind In reply to B00KAH0LIC [2009-02-01 05:24:56 +0000 UTC]

Ahh!!! Thank you! You are far to kind, the second verse was the most challenging for me to write because it was a transtion and i didnt want to spoil anything. Thanks for the fav aswell.

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B00KAH0LIC In reply to ALostMind [2009-02-01 05:43:36 +0000 UTC]

Lol. Well you had it turn out very nice and it didn't spoil it at all! ^^ And it's my pleasure! You deserve it!

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ALostMind In reply to B00KAH0LIC [2009-02-01 05:50:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, thank you

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B00KAH0LIC In reply to ALostMind [2009-02-03 22:27:49 +0000 UTC]

Welcome!

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ALostMind In reply to B00KAH0LIC [2009-02-03 22:31:42 +0000 UTC]

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aerialsindisguise [2009-02-01 05:02:22 +0000 UTC]

Well well well,
you has made poem. you has made good poem. i is proud.
nice job

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ALostMind In reply to aerialsindisguise [2009-02-01 05:03:20 +0000 UTC]

Haha, you make it sound as if i make good poems rarely, which i probably do

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aerialsindisguise In reply to ALostMind [2009-02-01 05:05:21 +0000 UTC]

lmao that's shame on your part, my bad if i made it seem like that, i mean i know you can't write but geez, this is pretty good.
KIDDING.
no seriously, i like it, a lot, like i have a physical attraction to it, i wanna marry it, if that's even legal.
alrighty, i am *not* normal.

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