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Alukei — I'll wait
Published: 2012-08-29 11:28:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 539; Favourites: 27; Downloads: 5
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Description I'll wait

Forever alone,
I don't want to be,
let's wait and see,
many might say,
but I'll pray,
and wait.

In the stars,
above in the sky,
no need to cry,
in a better place,
without any trace,
but I'll wait.
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Comments: 25

Rach09 [2012-08-30 18:23:18 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah!! Man have you got a good memory.

Really, really not, my dear friend. Definitely better for me to stick with my book writing as poems tend to flop with me lol

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CuddleSlut17 [2012-08-30 05:05:32 +0000 UTC]

I love giving feedback,

Being a writer myself I'll say the 2nd and 3rd line of the first stanza threw me off a little. Your 2nd stanza is beautiful very heartfelt. Love the ryme sceme. Keep it up. As you write more tour emotions will just flow like water. Nice job.

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cskadoz [2012-08-29 18:06:15 +0000 UTC]

nice gallery . . . expressive, like this poem. explore all your talent and interests . . . that's how we grow. you rock!

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Alukei In reply to cskadoz [2012-08-29 18:54:11 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you so much!

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Balham [2012-08-29 12:58:14 +0000 UTC]

That's very nice I'm not able to do poetry (I'm just so bad at it), so I can't give you a good critique about your poem, but I love it :3 I can't wait to see other literature stuff from you c: (lol I think I got this smiley from you, it's so cute )

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Alukei In reply to Balham [2012-08-29 18:54:33 +0000 UTC]

Aww thank you Yeah that's one of my favorite smileys

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Balham In reply to Alukei [2012-08-29 19:44:10 +0000 UTC]

Yeah it's just too cute

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Alukei In reply to Balham [2012-08-29 19:53:16 +0000 UTC]

ikr?

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Balham In reply to Alukei [2012-08-29 20:05:23 +0000 UTC]

What does "ikr" mean? Ovo

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Alukei In reply to Balham [2012-08-29 20:10:52 +0000 UTC]

i know right ^^

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Balham In reply to Alukei [2012-08-30 07:20:23 +0000 UTC]

Mmmh, I expected something like that :3 Oh, you changed your avatar! Nice

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Alukei In reply to Balham [2012-08-30 08:21:36 +0000 UTC]

haha XD
yeah it's a free avatar someone made. I can't do avatars for my life D: i just don't know. Maybe I',m going to try to make one today XDD

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Balham In reply to Alukei [2012-08-30 15:40:19 +0000 UTC]

Lol, I guess you finally managed to make one

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Alukei In reply to Balham [2012-08-30 17:35:19 +0000 UTC]

yeah but I dont necessarily like it XDD

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Balham In reply to Alukei [2012-08-31 08:13:06 +0000 UTC]

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Wolfgirl550 [2012-08-29 12:05:49 +0000 UTC]

I love this I definitely want to see more poetry from you xD

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Alukei In reply to Wolfgirl550 [2012-08-29 12:06:31 +0000 UTC]

ohh XD okay XD maybe

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Rach09 [2012-08-29 11:34:06 +0000 UTC]

Finally, something I can critique that's up my street

I'd say the 2nd and 3rd lines to the first stanza threw me a little bit as for me they just didn't seem to go.

But loved the whole of your second stanza

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Alukei In reply to Rach09 [2012-08-29 11:35:55 +0000 UTC]

hahaha thank you! XD and LOL you're right c: finally something you can critique. Considering that this poem is kinda really old it's not that bad. XD haha but thanks and I think so too..but I'm not that good with poems sadly

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Rach09 In reply to Alukei [2012-08-29 15:17:45 +0000 UTC]

It seriously isn't bad, it's actually really good I found it an enjoyable read that conveyed such powerful emotions.

I'm terrible at poems so don't worry about it xx

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Alukei In reply to Rach09 [2012-08-29 18:57:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

and noo! You're not terrible at all! I actually find your poems really awesome! Why dont you post some on here?

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Rach09 In reply to Alukei [2012-08-29 20:08:20 +0000 UTC]

I've only ever written one poem and it's too personal to post on here. Didn't realise you'd read it before though. Thanks!

Nah, my books are staying where they are, hidden lol

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Alukei In reply to Rach09 [2012-08-29 20:10:45 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, you once 3wrote a poem for me some time ago, remember? c:

but you could post some poems here I'm sure you're a very very good poem writer <3

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Rach09 In reply to Alukei [2012-08-31 10:40:27 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah!!! I remember now, how on earth did you remember that??? That makes 2 poems then lol

Me and poetry don't go well I'm afraid, best for me to stick with my books, but thanks anyway <3

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Alukei In reply to Rach09 [2012-08-31 19:06:33 +0000 UTC]

Idk...good memory? lol XD

yes your poetry is AWESOME so better shut up before im gonna poke you oops..too late (i warned you xD)

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