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AlwaysRainCheck — An Old August
Published: 2014-05-13 17:38:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 3492; Favourites: 179; Downloads: 0
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I watch you
cutting strawberries
in the amber afternoon,
sun on its midway 
to autumn;
you won't let me help
because secretly
only half of them
make it to the bowl.

          

I smile back 
at your playful eyes
because
you know.

   

It feels like
an old August,
in my stomach
some sort of sadness
some sort of joy.


Last night's thunderstorm
has left the ocean agitated,
wildly 
beautiful.
Life is nothing
but a vacant place, today
and we shall
let it be,
let the world
wait for us, today.


Cross legged
on my piano bench,
I play for the cat
a winter Debussy
she's happy,
I could tell
she smiles.

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Comments: 139

AlwaysRainCheck In reply to ??? [2016-08-15 00:04:12 +0000 UTC]

You just made my day Thank you so much! 

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BrittanniaRain [2016-01-23 02:06:26 +0000 UTC]

my cat thinks that every song is about her

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to BrittanniaRain [2016-01-24 01:10:01 +0000 UTC]

Adorable self centered creatures.   

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fableweaver55 [2015-12-14 16:20:56 +0000 UTC]

You weave words into a poem with such delicateness  

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to fableweaver55 [2015-12-16 15:35:04 +0000 UTC]

You are so kind  

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fableweaver55 In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2015-12-20 16:36:02 +0000 UTC]

 

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Andorada [2015-06-11 21:09:41 +0000 UTC]

this is such a lovely piece! happy to see it got a DD!!

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to Andorada [2015-08-17 23:18:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you ever so much!  
(Sorry for the late reply)

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TheBloodWriter [2015-03-25 18:52:59 +0000 UTC]

Much to enjoy about the scenery. I love poems like this, I call them amber poems after Jurassic Park because they are like beautiful moments in amber. Well done!

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to TheBloodWriter [2015-03-25 23:38:30 +0000 UTC]

Amber poems...That's such a beautiful way to put it. Thank you very much!

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Cerebraphasia [2015-03-15 19:59:39 +0000 UTC]

There's a tinge of nostalgia throughout this poem, a bittersweet reflection of sorts on how valuable simple moments are when they've long passed, at least according to my interpretation.  This is a touching piece of work; I like this.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to Cerebraphasia [2015-03-15 20:54:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for the kind words. Your interpretation is quite close to what I meant to say with this poem, I'm glad you like it. 

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Cerebraphasia In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2015-03-16 07:04:39 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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vvlpes [2015-02-15 03:36:39 +0000 UTC]

Whenever I pick berries, the exact same thing happens to me!
Only half of them make it to the house. Strange, I have no idea how that happened.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to vvlpes [2015-02-15 16:24:15 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha I know right...it's such a mystery.   

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vvlpes In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2015-02-15 21:12:13 +0000 UTC]

One that'll never be solved...

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beeswingblue [2015-02-05 02:39:18 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to beeswingblue [2015-02-10 16:46:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much  

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BlackBowfin [2014-08-19 02:32:00 +0000 UTC]

Simply beautiful.  

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to BlackBowfin [2014-08-19 11:39:12 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much I'm very glad you like it!

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tommyboywood [2014-08-15 13:06:01 +0000 UTC]

Wistful and pleasant

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to tommyboywood [2014-08-15 17:43:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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wispy-blue [2014-08-03 00:17:38 +0000 UTC]

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to wispy-blue [2014-08-03 22:29:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! 

And for the watch as well. 

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wispy-blue In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2014-08-04 01:25:36 +0000 UTC]

 

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Leah084 [2014-07-11 16:38:17 +0000 UTC]

loved this

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to Leah084 [2014-07-11 23:35:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you like it

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copper9lives [2014-06-24 20:31:21 +0000 UTC]

I am not at all surprised that this received a DD. It's exquisite, delicately crafted, filled and brimming with the light that hearkens the change in the year, the pivot from summer into fall. I know this timeless time. I know this place. Share it?
Harbinger Days

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to copper9lives [2014-06-25 12:44:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for your kind comment, I'm glad this resonates with you.  

And thank you for sharing, I can feel the first light of autumn in your words  

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copper9lives In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2014-06-25 19:10:51 +0000 UTC]

I thought you might be someone who, like me, felt that shift in the light, in the wind of change, Earth's polarity subtly changing...
Thank you for sharing the sojourn!

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to copper9lives [2014-06-26 14:48:06 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes, it's one of my favorite moments of the year  
Thank you as well!  

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copper9lives In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2014-06-26 20:59:44 +0000 UTC]

When the summer shifts this year, expect to hear from me!   

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to copper9lives [2014-06-26 22:29:52 +0000 UTC]

Haha okay!   

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NemoX7 [2014-06-19 11:18:36 +0000 UTC]

Never realised you achieved a DD until now. A splendid poem that truly deserved this accolade. Congratulations and well done!

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to NemoX7 [2014-06-19 17:05:20 +0000 UTC]

Oh I'm still surprised to be honest (: Thank you so much for your kind words, I'm glad you like it  

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NemoX7 In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2014-06-19 19:14:55 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome. I think it's a great bit of writing; a masterpiece. I'm still surprised after getting my 2nd DD haha.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to NemoX7 [2014-06-20 17:10:54 +0000 UTC]

Well, coming from a skilled writer like you, I'm deeply honored   
Oh your latest DD is amazing  

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ezradeacon [2014-06-02 03:15:29 +0000 UTC]

  I'm so glad it was selected! Congratulations luv, well deserved.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to ezradeacon [2014-06-02 12:57:31 +0000 UTC]

Aw, thank you so very much!    

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GuinevereToGwen [2014-05-28 11:25:42 +0000 UTC]

Very simple, yet effectively conveying the joy of simple pleasures. Well done.

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to GuinevereToGwen [2014-05-28 13:55:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!  

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GuinevereToGwen In reply to AlwaysRainCheck [2014-05-28 20:15:12 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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The-Craftsmans-Pen [2014-05-23 16:26:05 +0000 UTC]

Excellent work! It almost tastes sweet - and the flavour would be strawberries and honey (because this kinda reminds me of a poem called 'Strawberries' by Edwin Morgan )

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to The-Craftsmans-Pen [2014-05-24 00:31:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much for your kind words  

I'm an avid poetry reader, but to be honest I'm not familiar with the work of Edwin Morgan so I thank you also for acquainting me with his beautiful poetry.  

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StormsAndSwallows [2014-05-23 02:24:41 +0000 UTC]

this is gorgeous, thank you for posting and congrats

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to StormsAndSwallows [2014-05-23 11:38:51 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much for your kind words!  

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dreameroftheblue [2014-05-23 01:35:20 +0000 UTC]

... this somehow makes me very nostalgic and now there are actual tears in my eyes ;w;

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to dreameroftheblue [2014-05-23 11:38:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for this comment  it means a lot,to me, that my words resonates with you.

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TheOneWhoLovesToEat [2014-05-23 00:57:59 +0000 UTC]

This poem made me feel all warm and nostalgic when I read it C:

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AlwaysRainCheck In reply to TheOneWhoLovesToEat [2014-05-23 11:35:36 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much   I'm happy you like this!

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