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Practising anatomy.I'm gonna draw a ton of different poses. I'm starting out with easy ones till I get all proportions right.
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Looks pretty good, mya. :3
However, you might want to change te posing of Bianca's right arm, but that's just me.
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Oh my, this is pretty amazing, I love it! I'm horrible with anatomy I think you're doing great!
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Very good ! What I'd say you could improve on is the arms are a bit too short, and the hands are a bit too big ~ And it seems like you're going for anime proportions but just so you know for realistic proportions, the neck would be much larger c;
And they kinda sorta of kankles SORRYYYYYYY
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RIGHT THEN.
Next part.
About the girl on our right.
HER right arm, the curve? It almost intersects with the lineart of her upper arm. Make it much shorter. You do that a lot, actually - pay attention to it~ Just do that with your own arm, and look at how far that little wrinkle goes.
Forearms. Need to be longer. Looks a bit awkward. Also, arms can get really skinny around the wrist, even though she's wearing gloves, it should be a bit visible.
Also, you might want to erase the lineart of the shoulder by the bow, unless that bow is translucent!
Her left hand. It's pretty good, but make the fingers more jagged. I don't know how to explain this, really, but... The knuckles should be more visible, I suppose. Also, when your fingers are curled in like that, it's actually a really clenched fist. Try maybe putting her thumb on the outside of her hand, and her fingers pressed flat against her palm, instead of curling in. It'll look less stressed.
Her knee that's bent is slightly too skinny.
I think you should make her tail a tiny bit lower. Cat's tails attach at the base of the spine, and judging by what I can see, that would be a tiny bit lower.
Leg is pretty good, though you should make the front part curve in just the tiniest bit more. Too much and it'll look odd, so don't go overboard! Also, the ankle - it looks a bit disjointed. Make it curve into the foot more. Also, that bump on our ankle - just because there is a ribbon around her ankle doesn't mean it's not visible. Just a slight outwards curve!
Her left thumb - has to be a tiny bit longer. I'm nitpicking here, but everything counts! xD
There was something else...
Oh! This isn't about the anatomy or proportions, but the skirt! Oh, the skirt! It's facing directly towards us, while the rest of the body is tilted! What is this!? AND! There's no bend where the knee is! It's evidently far enough forward that it should be seen in the wrinkles of the skirt, yet none are visible!
...And that should be all.
Hope I somewhat helped. o_o
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I'll just reply to this part in general. XD
Thank you very much for the critique. ; o ;
I'll try to fix some of the things. XD But I'll keep them all in mind for the next drawings.
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I'm too lazy to write a proper critique, but here are a few things -
For the girl on the left:
First off, her right (our left) hand should be a little lower. And even if it is still facing directly towards you, I modeled my arm in the mirror doing the same position - you'd be able to see a little of her elbow facing in. Or, what you could do instead, is move the arm a little out or in, then you could show a different part of her arm that looks less awkward.
Also, her arm that's facing out, when you put your arm in that position, it feels a bit... I dunno - your spinal plates kinda move into an odd position. 
Another thing - stop drawing pigeon feet! xD I realize it's a cute position, but it's a rather awkward one to stand in, and the way you draw your feet always have them going up. Very hard to balance like that. I know drawing feet facing straight towards you is hard, but that's what you're trying to fix~
Both her arms need to be a bit longer. Well, I dunno about the one facing towards us, but the one on our right should be a bit longer. Our arms reach down a bit past mid thigh, not directly mid thigh. Think of it more like they're slightly above the knee.
Um, her head should be bigger or her hands smaller.
I think hands smaller, because she's about 6.5 heads now, so.
Oh! Fun fact! Did you know that your foot is as long as your forearm? So fix that!
Also, her arm - you can see the elbow, there should also be a teensy marker on the top, too. Very subtle, though.
...I've already written more than I intended.
Next girl!
Who looks like Ami!
Um, something about the neck is bothering me. Not quite sure what. Maybe it's too short when before they were too long? Or maybe I'm hallucinating. Who knows?
...I'll post the rest in a separate comment, this is really long.
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Biancaβ₯β₯β₯and Amiβ₯β₯β₯ Beautiful <3
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They are both so cute! You really did an awesome job! C:
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You're very welcome! C:
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oooh the proportions look rly good in these ones, see ur not doing such long legs anymore poo ene
the girl on the left's forgot her name left arm should be longer, length of about half way in between her thigh and knee
apart for that very nice ^^
*slaps both those asses*
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Okay~ o u o Thanks for the advice.
e u e I see what you did there~
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I think it's great you're doing this.
It will really help you out.
I'm not going to write a critique because I don't have that much time to write a long paragraph, so I'll just point out a few things about this picture that may help you.
The number one thing you do a lot with your full bodies, is you draw the proportions a little off.
If you put your hand on your face, your hand can basically cover half of your face, as you have in this picture, that hands can practically cover the whole face. So I think you should make the head a bit bigger. Not too much.
Another thing is their waists are small, but the arms and legs seem too thick to me. When you see a woman with a smaller waist, majority of the time their arms and legs are thinner as well.
And lastly, I think their calf's are much too long. I see you make this mistake a lot, which is okay because everyone is trying to improve. They just looks very tall.
I guess I did write a paragraph! I didn't think I would.
But you're amazing Amai so just keep doing what you're doing and focus on this training, I know it will pay off.
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Thank you for the critique. ; o ;
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Oh no problem at all sweetie 
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This lovely, really cute
I liked a lot of the poses of the girls
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great! The flow looks really good here^^
don't be afraid to work with photos as a reference because they are a great help!
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Yeah.
Hopefully I'll get some good critiques.
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I really need to work on my chibi proportions ; n ; , I feel like they don't look as cute as they used to
And I would critique it but I'm horrible at that
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I can give you some critiques. o u o
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Amg you would ; u ; ~?
Thank youuuu <3333
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Yeah.
Which one of your drawings do you want a critique of?
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Could you critique the one I recently drew for Miiyuki o u o ~?
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