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Published: 2005-08-24 19:55:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 83; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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SlowSlow them down,
With broken nails,
Weak and weary fingers
Clutching at the air,
Latching onto their success.
Must slow them all,
Stop passing by
A hollow shadow
with bright green eyes
Reaches from another path.
Don't let them go,
Must not let them pass,
Slow them all
In this place here.
Slow to just a crawl,
Must slow them all.
-By Shane Mang
Aug 24/2005
Comments: 11
This almost makes me cry (exxageration. But your piece really does move me) because I can relate so much to this poem. I know how it feels to just want everything to move with your breathing instead of forcing you along your way ahead of your days. Busy years, all overwhelming. I thought it was interesting that you chose the color green to describe the eyes personifying the shadow; I thought that perhaps you as the writer specifically chose that color as a symbol of life (life=green, like plantlife?) and that you wanted to create the image of life as an imposing shadow that engulfed those who are so overtaken during their race towards death. Or am I just contradicting myself? I just took a spoonful of cough medicine and I feel thoroughly drowsy to even concentrate on what I am saying.
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As always I believe that the interpretation is entirely up to the reader. Otherwise poetry is just preaching, and that's not what I'm about. That being said however I love how you enjoyed reading my work, and your intepretation was awesome!
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OOO....i really really really really find this one intresting. What made you want to write it? I COULD LIKE FREAKEN IMPLY SO MUCH???!?!?!? I dont understand things to well, so could you explain?
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Well, It has a good sound to it. The rest, I have no business commenting on becuase I know 👍: 0 ⏩: 0
you spelt success wrong. how can you be successful if you cant spell success! aside from that (*tongue in cheek*) - i like the feelings invoked, and think the repetion of 'must slow them all' holds this piece together.
PS one might also wonder how these get posted, when you are supposed to be at work; working.
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one might question what that "smiley" implies, claud.
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like the analogies and images used.. hate the fact that you feel this way.. though the writing itself leaves a lot of room for interpretation. as cheesy as it sounds, i know. im assuming this has something to do with your latest journal, so i'll tread lightly.
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