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Description you are a broken house with smashed windows

and ivy growing between your fingers

you are fragile and with every

creaking footstep on the stairs you pray so 

hard that you have let the right one in


there will be people,

people with minds so blissfully ignorant that

they walk right through you and do not 

see the splintered furniture residing within your

body, you are invisible to them,

and sometimes

you wonder if you are even there


but then there are other people - 

people worth staying standing for,

people who will walk in and gently run their 

fingers along the parts of yourself that

you forgot were even there,

people who will explore your anatomy like

it is an undiscovered world. 

let them find the stale cup of water you left

beneath your bed 5 months ago,

let them find the brittle treasures you hide

in your fireplace, and how you masochistically

adore the way that you could just

catch on fire at any

second


but do not let them break you,

not ever again.



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Comments: 67

anobrain In reply to ??? [2015-02-21 13:10:58 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much! x

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Lady-Weavile-461 [2014-07-29 20:28:34 +0000 UTC]

you are a broken house with smashed windows

and ivy growing between your fingers

you are fragile and with every

creaking footstep on the stairs you pray so 

hard that you have let the right one in

That opening is a beautiful description, nice job

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anobrain In reply to Lady-Weavile-461 [2014-07-29 23:49:41 +0000 UTC]

thank you, lovely!

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PurpleFaith15 [2014-05-18 07:25:02 +0000 UTC]

I love this it just beautiful writing I can't help but read it over and over again!

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anobrain In reply to PurpleFaith15 [2014-05-18 09:02:42 +0000 UTC]

thank you!!

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PurpleFaith15 In reply to anobrain [2014-05-18 21:52:15 +0000 UTC]

You are very creative and I love to read so reading this made me feel what you meant in the writing sorry don't mean to be so deep about it, it just that I love how you wrote it

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anobrain In reply to PurpleFaith15 [2014-05-19 03:36:19 +0000 UTC]

you're too sweet - this means a lot, thank you

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PurpleFaith15 In reply to anobrain [2014-05-19 03:37:31 +0000 UTC]

<3

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TheGalleryOfEve [2014-05-18 01:11:11 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!

I’m very happy for you!!!

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anobrain In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2014-05-18 09:02:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much!

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TheGalleryOfEve In reply to anobrain [2014-05-21 03:26:16 +0000 UTC]

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tailsiefox [2014-05-18 00:25:07 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful.   

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anobrain In reply to tailsiefox [2014-05-18 09:02:03 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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tailsiefox In reply to anobrain [2014-05-18 12:35:50 +0000 UTC]

No problem.   

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kipdog15 [2014-05-17 22:33:26 +0000 UTC]

...

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W0nderbolts [2014-05-17 22:02:19 +0000 UTC]

this is very deep and meaningful o.o

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Kinglorshi [2014-05-17 18:39:47 +0000 UTC]

I really like the metaphor here, it's imaginative and engaging. It may be me, but sometimes the metaphor is split up with the human body in certain segments that just confuses me. Maybe I'm inept, but here are some examples:

"you are a broken house with smashed windows/and ivy running between your fingers"
My personal thought here is to keep with the metaphor of the house. Some spots can reference/allude to the human body, but there it is a bit confusing.

"people worth staying standing for"

At first this puzzled me, but I think I got it. Personal preference of mine suggests different words, but take it for what you will.

All in all this is creative! I do enjoy the metaphor.

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anobrain In reply to Kinglorshi [2014-05-17 19:22:39 +0000 UTC]

i totally understand where you're coming from. i have a habit of kind of getting caught up in my own thoughts and just writing it, haha
thanks so much for the feedback. have a lovely day

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Kinglorshi In reply to anobrain [2014-05-18 15:20:13 +0000 UTC]

As do I, but I'm glad it was useful to you! You have a lovely day as well!

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MomotsukiNezumi [2014-05-17 18:32:06 +0000 UTC]

Sharp, poignant, and bitterly infused with a stark, naked sense of blunt, unfettered ferocity. Very powerful, I love it!

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anobrain In reply to MomotsukiNezumi [2014-05-17 19:20:35 +0000 UTC]

thank you so so much it means a lot

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SaraSkyWolf [2014-05-17 17:56:39 +0000 UTC]

I know you said this wasn't written for anyone (or anything) specific, but the best writings are the ones that people can relate to. I, for instance, absolutely love the sentiment behind this piece, and I definitely sympathize.
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation!

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anobrain In reply to SaraSkyWolf [2014-05-17 19:20:12 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much.
(ps, loving the icon. geronimo)

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SaraSkyWolf In reply to anobrain [2014-05-17 22:16:25 +0000 UTC]

No problem!
(It took me a while to find a picture of him holding the mop, but it was worth it! Thank you )

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SapphireCityMedia [2014-05-17 17:44:27 +0000 UTC]

Wow! Amazing!

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anobrain In reply to SapphireCityMedia [2014-05-17 19:19:37 +0000 UTC]

thank you!!

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SapphireCityMedia In reply to anobrain [2014-05-19 14:41:37 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome1

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VMenFangirl [2014-05-17 17:02:15 +0000 UTC]

I love the "you" reference you do here is deep... in my case is one way of how the writer gets me in their stories X,D so for me is cool .....oh, and i love every word, is beautiful

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anobrain In reply to VMenFangirl [2014-05-17 19:19:22 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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VMenFangirl In reply to anobrain [2014-05-17 22:49:37 +0000 UTC]

you´re very welcome!

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nosedivve [2014-05-17 16:15:58 +0000 UTC]

Yay! I'm super happy you have your second DD feature. You totally deserve it.

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anobrain In reply to nosedivve [2014-05-17 19:18:58 +0000 UTC]

thank you so so so much shane

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SycamoreSea [2014-05-17 15:42:26 +0000 UTC]

This... is really... This is - nope, I cannot find a word. But I love it. (: Congrats on a well-deserved DD!

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anobrain In reply to SycamoreSea [2014-05-17 19:18:35 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much!!!

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SycamoreSea In reply to anobrain [2014-05-18 13:31:40 +0000 UTC]

Of course!! <3

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Daghrgenzeen [2014-05-17 15:20:42 +0000 UTC]

Very beautiful. Congrats on the DD!

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anobrain In reply to Daghrgenzeen [2014-05-17 19:18:17 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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delta7Xx [2014-05-17 12:53:40 +0000 UTC]

it's beautiful!

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anobrain In reply to delta7Xx [2014-05-17 19:18:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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delta7Xx In reply to anobrain [2014-05-18 02:03:06 +0000 UTC]

nice work!

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dragon-fly-to-me [2014-05-17 11:59:37 +0000 UTC]

...this is wonderful, whomever you wrote it about.

I enjoyed the awakening the subject goes through--realizing the deep strength that can be found in opening up, to being vulnerable. Very relateable to so many.

Well done.

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anobrain In reply to dragon-fly-to-me [2014-05-17 19:17:23 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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camelopardalisinblue [2014-05-17 08:45:39 +0000 UTC]

You changed your name and confused me!

This is gorgeous, and congratulations on the DD.

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anobrain In reply to camelopardalisinblue [2014-05-17 19:16:49 +0000 UTC]

haha! sorry for the confusion!! 
thank you so much

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camelopardalisinblue In reply to anobrain [2014-05-22 10:08:58 +0000 UTC]



You're forgiven... this time. Don't do it again!

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Sammur-amat [2014-01-22 05:59:46 +0000 UTC]

there is just so much sophistication and strength in this poem, sweetheart, i'm blown away

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anobrain In reply to Sammur-amat [2014-01-22 15:50:45 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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tiajones [2014-01-09 22:15:00 +0000 UTC]

hmmm this is lovely.

i like it very much. <3

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anobrain In reply to tiajones [2014-01-10 10:59:31 +0000 UTC]

thank you, sweetheart

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tiajones In reply to anobrain [2014-01-10 14:03:05 +0000 UTC]

of course <3

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