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IssacBlast [2011-05-30 05:45:17 +0000 UTC]
For a piece with this kind of flow, the ending fits wonderfully. Less terminality and more unseen continuation which, I think, was the intention.
The way you tell this reminds me vividly of a girl in the late-1960's. Flirty, attractive, and a regular customer at the oh-so-popular ma & pa sodashops of the time. The comments about roller blades only solidified this, making me think of the servers and Sonic and the originators of that type of service. Funnily enough it's from the same era.
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little-supernova [2011-05-29 11:59:48 +0000 UTC]
Seeing as this is sort of like a ramble, the ending fits nicely. Good job.
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