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Published: 2011-05-28 20:17:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 307; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 1
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Description you always reminded me of the ocean
did you know that, darling?
you were the most beautiful thing in the world
completely necessary
no one could live without you
and you could rip apart the world with ease.

did i ever tell you, darling
how your big black sunglasses made you look like a movie star
how all the boys would swoon when they saw the lipstick stains you left on your straws and
how they could never take their eyes off you as you sped away on your second hand roller skates?
those boys always wanted to take you out for a sodapop, darling
but you had bigger things in your head than soda fountains and idle chitchat and kisses on the cheek.

and i wonder, darling
do you remember where you came from?
that old house in the middle of a field of yellow
stretching out as far as the eye could see
did you leave yourself behind in those old polaroid pictures
smiling your little crooked smile, trapped forever in a battered old frame?

someday maybe you'll stop running, darling
maybe you'll find someone who makes the sodapop special and the chitchat anything but idle and the kisses on the cheek electric
and maybe, if you can't settle down
he'll run alongside you
on a harley, i'll bet
and you'll be on your skates and he'll be on his bike and you'll go
forever
and he'll show you the world you've never been able to see
and you'll be perfect together
maybe, darling.

just maybe.
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Comments: 9

TheAppleScientist [2011-06-16 13:22:57 +0000 UTC]

Very nice imagery. And I like the repetition of "darling". Well done!

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aprilwednesday In reply to TheAppleScientist [2011-06-16 21:32:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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TheAppleScientist In reply to aprilwednesday [2011-06-16 22:52:42 +0000 UTC]

No prob

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aFteRLifeR [2011-05-31 01:03:21 +0000 UTC]

this. is. amazing. once again your writing filled my brain with colourful bubbles and made me daydream. love it.

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aprilwednesday In reply to aFteRLifeR [2011-06-02 22:15:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much

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IssacBlast [2011-05-30 05:45:17 +0000 UTC]

For a piece with this kind of flow, the ending fits wonderfully. Less terminality and more unseen continuation which, I think, was the intention.

The way you tell this reminds me vividly of a girl in the late-1960's. Flirty, attractive, and a regular customer at the oh-so-popular ma & pa sodashops of the time. The comments about roller blades only solidified this, making me think of the servers and Sonic and the originators of that type of service. Funnily enough it's from the same era.

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aprilwednesday In reply to IssacBlast [2011-06-02 22:14:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

Yeah, it made me think of that too when I reread it - I'm pretty into that kind of retro style, so I think that's why it came out that way

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little-supernova [2011-05-29 11:59:48 +0000 UTC]

Seeing as this is sort of like a ramble, the ending fits nicely. Good job.

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aprilwednesday In reply to little-supernova [2011-05-29 16:59:42 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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