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Aquitius — Paper Cranes by-nc-nd
Published: 2011-03-09 20:31:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 515; Favourites: 21; Downloads: 4
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Description       A thousand paper cranes floated away vagrantly across the kaleidoscopic water, dipping in the crescent waves and dancing among the reeds; the masters wishing their creation into the imaginary afterlife. No sense of danger, no sense of rhythm, the incubated birds sank into the froth - one by one in play.
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Comments: 29

Black-Richa [2011-08-19 03:17:12 +0000 UTC]

So this is what a flash fiction is...
I like your choice of words

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Aquitius In reply to Black-Richa [2011-08-19 09:36:07 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

But yes, flash fiction - the micro story. *sigh* For those too lazy to write novels.

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Black-Richa In reply to Aquitius [2011-08-23 03:18:47 +0000 UTC]

A novel is just a chapter at a time
You're welcome

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Creativesm75 [2011-06-16 12:28:08 +0000 UTC]

COOL

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Aquitius In reply to Creativesm75 [2011-06-18 01:26:24 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you think so!

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uturn190 [2011-03-24 16:12:36 +0000 UTC]

NICE

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Aquitius In reply to uturn190 [2011-03-24 16:19:33 +0000 UTC]

Yay capitals Thanks

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uturn190 In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-24 18:50:27 +0000 UTC]

NO PROBLEM

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NymeeKat [2011-03-13 04:41:29 +0000 UTC]

I loved the visual this created! Oragami cranes floating down a river...

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Aquitius In reply to NymeeKat [2011-03-13 14:12:19 +0000 UTC]

It's something i'm planning to do myself in a couple of days.

Cheers for the fav.

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NymeeKat In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-13 16:10:21 +0000 UTC]

Take pics!

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BeautifulDisaster-07 [2011-03-11 02:56:59 +0000 UTC]

Love.
Vocabulary, brilliant [as always]...particularly the use of "vagrantly" and the description of water as "kaleidoscopic". Simply fantastic. I'm amazed that you can fit so much into a mere fifty words. 'Tis beautiful <3

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Aquitius In reply to BeautifulDisaster-07 [2011-03-12 20:30:17 +0000 UTC]

I'm not sure if water can be kaleidoscopic...

But as Aquitius wills it shall be

Thanks for such kind words as usual

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BeautifulDisaster-07 In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-12 21:15:05 +0000 UTC]

I think it can be xD
You are most welcome, as usual! <3

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a-fiery-boom [2011-03-11 01:20:10 +0000 UTC]

More enthusiasm please?

I like it a lot! I think the line "the masters wishing their creations into the afterlife" adds a bit of deeper meaning to it as well!

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Aquitius In reply to a-fiery-boom [2011-03-12 20:27:10 +0000 UTC]

Enthusiasm? Nah, i'll just waddle around like an apathetic duck please

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JasmineClouds [2011-03-10 03:03:16 +0000 UTC]

So vivid in my mind!Wonderful job!

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Aquitius In reply to JasmineClouds [2011-03-10 20:06:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, i thought it was pretty lame myself.

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JasmineClouds In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-10 23:47:58 +0000 UTC]

FFF- you call that lame? Man, then my stuff is below lamexD But if you think it's lame,then you can get better!

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Aquitius In reply to JasmineClouds [2011-03-12 20:23:34 +0000 UTC]

Your stuff is great

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JasmineClouds In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-13 00:22:18 +0000 UTC]

Why thanks!Yours is awesome too~

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bookbunny9 [2011-03-10 01:46:48 +0000 UTC]

Simply lovely! Oh, the imagery!!!

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Aquitius In reply to bookbunny9 [2011-03-10 20:07:59 +0000 UTC]

Thanks One can fit alot of imagery into 50 words i guess if you try hard enough.

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bookbunny9 In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-12 20:12:00 +0000 UTC]

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BaronAutumn [2011-03-10 00:03:40 +0000 UTC]

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Aquitius In reply to BaronAutumn [2011-03-10 20:06:51 +0000 UTC]

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Sunnada [2011-03-09 22:33:15 +0000 UTC]

I like it, very descriptive. Are you happy with it?

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Aquitius In reply to Sunnada [2011-03-10 20:07:21 +0000 UTC]

Meh, i'm not sure. I don't think it's my best piece...

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Sunnada In reply to Aquitius [2011-03-10 22:46:15 +0000 UTC]

It might not be your best piece but I like it

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