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autumn-cannibal — Battle Cry
Published: 2007-08-25 10:36:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 588; Favourites: 13; Downloads: 2
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Can you hear the battle cry?The doomed alarm, you nemesis
Now barricade the premises
The horror
The children fear the battle cry
The blood soaked shriek of marching foes
Tenacious, as the legend goes
Such horror
Becoming clear, their battle cry
And as the land begins to shake
Our hearts erupt in thunderous quake
Here's horror
Be still, my dear, the battle cry
May spark the horde's belligerence
But soon they shall seek penitence
What horror?
For when they near my battle cry
They will beware the piercing hiss
And thus retreat in cowardice
My horror
Comments: 50
You have a way to play with people's emotion autumn. XD I love this. The power and fear is all to adventurous for me.
The description is all so clear to be dancing in my mind right now. I love the sinister feeling here. Great poem as always.
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I like how you call me autumn 
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Autumn? Haha, well, don't expect me to call you cannibal ok? Lol.
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I guess not, people might get the wrong idea
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That my friend, is a mystery. But when one starts eating another, another starts eating the others. (*blinks* I don't know why I keep saying random stuff today. 
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it's actually based on one of my favourite pieces of artwork by Salvador Dali. What about yours?
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Oh, cool. Salvador Dali...sadly, I haven't heard of him before. But he has an interedting name. Is he a famous person? Maybe I should research about him in wikipedia. 
Lacelette, well, this name is actually based on one of my favorite comic characters that I made myself. I look at her as I see myself. Thats why I made my username this. Although, this is the only site which I chose this username.
My other username in other sites is Wondering**Mind. I like this username more. Thought of it myself. XD Its because people are always saying that I'm always found dreaming somewhere so it like my mind is always wondering about something. Thats how I got that username. But I guess you can't change your username here huh? =3
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Don't think so, but you're current name is just as good
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Really? Owh cool! I gotta research about him. *writes down in notepad*
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have fun, I think you'll like it
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That means a lot
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I love this one. As with all of your work, you paint a vivid picture.
like someone else said, everything in the 21st century is a quaint ordeal.
War destroys so many lives...on both ends.
It's just something one sits and shakes one's head at. It'll drive one mad if one let's it.
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That's quite true
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The beauty in the words, the horror in the image. Beauty trapped with horrid words of truth. Wonderful job.
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Wow, that is an inspired comment, thanks so much
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Most welcome, well deserved *smiles*
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Wow, this piece is so powerful. Totally overwhelmed me. I've read it about five times now but I'm still speechless. I will leave you another comment when my brain starts functioning properly. But just wow!!!!! Well done!!!
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Thanks, you amazement means so much
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This is my favourite work of yours so far, and that's saying a lot considering i love everything you do.
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Indeed. It means a lot that you like this piece, I'm enjoying mixing up my structures. Thanks so much
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Beautifully written with a keen insight! A proud piece indeed!
~Kris~
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Yes, my piece is quite proud of itself
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war sucks plain and simple, your poem is great Autumn it really is. it goes straight to my favs
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Thats good to know Grime
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An other great structure to experiment with.
I like this one a lot for the repitition and gradual progression. It draws the reader in quite strongly as the message builds with it.
Well done
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Thanks so much, I'm enjoying the experimentation
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You imagery makes this feel so real
It's sad
I don't understand mankind
or it's woes
but this makes me tear up a bit
cause I know it's the truth about the world
Lovely work... I can stop rereading it
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That means a great deal, I'm glad I could reach out to people in such a way. Don't fret, mankind will realise it's flaws sooner or later
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We can only hope they will
before we are all destroyed.
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Don't worry, our inspirational words have been immortalised for the monkeys to read
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True that, my friend.
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In the 21st century, everything is a quaint ordeal.
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I like your format it's really different. ^^ Love the poem too by the way.
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Thanks so much, I greatly appreciate it
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You're welcome I honestly enjoy your work please continue to write.
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That is good to hear, you have a lot of talent and it would be a shame for it to go to waste.
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Thank you. You are very kind.
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Wow... the rhyming structure is really neat, and it paints a wonderful picture... it's got that almost old feel like Longfellow... nice!
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Wow , I've never been compared to Longfellow, thanks so much
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He's one of my favorite poets... nothing beats the classics, but you write with such a similar tone it's really amazing!
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He is an amazing writer, I'm honoured that you think we have a similar tone
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Well, thank you then, means a great deal
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