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autumn-cannibal β Sonnet XXV
Published: 2007-08-16 08:48:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 438; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 1
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Within arms length, but oceans out of reachI try and clasp her hand, but grip the skies
I catch the whisper of her righteous screech
My sunβs light shines; I know not when she dies
We steal a kiss and share a warm embrace
But sneak past continents, lest we be seen
My one and only homage to her face
A thought, a glimpse, a day that might have been
The letters fade and crumple, and my heart
Cannot recite her touch, her taste, her scent
The angel, who did yesteryear depart
Has left an amnesiacβs lament
If she did love me still, would she not speak?
A breath that blows across some mountain peak
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Comments: 32
Lost love is a thing that can destroy the best of us... very moving.
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Thanks for understanding
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Mmm, love it. The last two lines are the best. So.....true? real? honest? Anyway, really great, I'm enjoying your gallery so much. And thanks for the fave.
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You're quite welcome. It is supportive comments such as yours that help me to write
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The imagery is pretty cliche in this piece, but damn If I'm not a sucker for this piece's content. Good job.
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I apologise for the cliche's, but thank you for the sentiment
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Beautiful rhythm, language and structure. I adored the word 'yesteryear', you wrote with admirable confidence.
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Thank you so much. that means a lot from someone with such talent as yours
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Aaaw, that's a very nice thing to say but... 
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I have indeed, I would certainly not presume to lie to you. Is that question been asked because you doubt the quality of your work?
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No, just because you didn't comment
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Well, in that cas, i will offer my critique on some of your poems forthwith
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Arigatou ^^ and I see you've followed through on your word
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I have indeed, I felt it was only polite, seeing as you asked so nicely
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The descriptive techniques are marvelous. Sonnets are so ambitious. I am impressed!
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Wow, thanks so much, that means a lot
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My dear, I am truly regretful that you have had to endure this type of pain.
The true comfort of it, though, is that you can create marvelous works of art.
I was once told that from true pain comes great art, and your piece is living proof of that.
Keep writing, though I do hope that you'll have happier subjects to post about soon.
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As do I. i can't help but feel that I may have been over reacting, but I seem to embrace my emotions more intensely than I should, leading me to become more attached and eventually more hurt by it. Thank you for the kind words, my dear
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To err is human, and to feel pain is also human, my friend.
To be more in touch with your emotions is not always a bad thing...it allows us to feel empathy.
I am sorry that you get hurt, because a person such as yourself should never feel that kind of pain.
However, there is a bright side: what doesn't kill us only makes us stronger.
Fortitude, my dear...you have a wealth of it.
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Indeed, lucky me
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We are all human, dear.
Don't punish yourself for falling of the horse sometimes...
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I'm fine with that, but why does the horse have to trample me, and I keep letting it trample me
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That is a question you must answer yourself: perhaps the horse tramples upon you because you allow it to do so.
So, instead of lying there, should you move?
What would happen if you just...changed your point of view?
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I guess you're right. Thank you so much
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You are, as always, very welcome
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I myself have not experienced this, and yet, I find myself so strongly affected by it.
I am sure that your words touch emotions inside all of those who read them.
A great job indeed.
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Thank you, I hope so too
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It's kind of effect where you yearn not to let it happen to you, even though it is inevitable.
It made me feel grateful for eveything I still have.
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I'm glad i could be of such service to you
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I love this piece. And I've just recently gotten past the 'longing for the past' phase of a breakup, so I really feel this. Great job
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Thanks a lot, I love when people can relate to my poetry, it feels like it may be helping someone. I appreciate the kind words
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You are certainly welcome
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