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Okay, this is a scene from my fanfiction, To Save The World Again. This is the excerpt:

She ran her finger around his scar on his face, and put her hand on his cheek as Ara walked in. She sat down next to Mai and pulled the warm blanket from the trip over him. Mai looked at the young girl, and it was plain to see that she was just as worried and scared, if not more, for him. Mai put her hand on Ara’s shoulder. “Thank you for taking care of him.”

Ara just stared at him. “I need him, Mai. He’s my best friend.”

Mai looked at Zuko again. “How did it happen?”

Ara bowed her head and closed her eyes. “Azula,” she whispered.

Mai’s heart filled with fury. “She’s the most evil, vile, corrupt person on the planet. I want to kill her now! She’s gone too far!”

“Ugghhh…”

They both turned to Zuko. He half opened his eyes, blinked, and looked around. “Mai? Ara? Where am I? Why do I feel so weak?”

Mai moved closed to him. She smiled. “You’re home,” she whispered. She leaned into him, careful of his chest, and placed her lips on his. “Rest now,” she said. He smiled and looked at Ara. “Thank you for saving my life,” he said.

He placed a cold and shaky hand on hers in her lap. But it scared her. She had never in her life known his hands to be cold. They were always warm, full of comfort, full of life. She lifted his hand and put it on her cheek, as if her own heat and life would travel through their touch. He smiled, sighed, and winced. Ara placed his hand back under the blanket.

“Go to sleep now. We’re here.”

As his eyes closed and he fell asleep, Mai looked at Ara. “Come, sit down, have some tea and rest. Tell me what happened.”

Ara sat down crosslegged and sipped her tea. Mai sat across from her. She waited patiently while the young girl got warm and comfortable, and then she started.

“It was after we found my mom, Sokka, and Toph. My dad was pouring his soul out when he found my mother’s body, and we all sat there and cried.”

“And you weren’t crying?”

“I was, but I knew I had to be strong for my dad right then. I hadn’t seen her in 2 and a half years; he hadn’t seen her in 15 years.” She sighed. “Anyway, we were on our way out when Azula burst through the wall. Zuko, Toph, Sokka and I kept her and the Dai Li back, when Appa burst through the roof. We all got on him while Zuko distracted her. He shot flames at the remaining roof, and it collapsed. He thought it fell on her, so he turned and ran to jump on Appa, when she leapt out and—” Ara stopped talking and started crying silently.

“Go on,” Mai urged softly.

Ara looked up, her grey eyes glistening. “Azula dug her first two fingers into his heart and let the lightning fill him. He shot backwards, out of the top level of the prison, and he started to fall. So I jumped off Appa and dove to catch him. Once I did, I bended a tornado back up to Appa, and we took off. I set him down and felt his chest, but he was gone.

I suddenly had to find out if I could heal. I bended some rain and ran it over the hole in his chest, and as I breathed out, he breathed in. I hadn’t really healed him, but somehow I brought him back.” She looked at Zuko. “And then we flew to a fire nation village, where Sokka got his old sword master to help, and he gave us supplies and bandaged Zuko up. And we came home. Zuko saved us. He’s a hero, but who—.” Her eyes looked into Mai’s, whose were filled with tears. “—who paid for it.”

“But you risked your life for him,” Mai said.

“I had to. I love him—though not in the way you do.”

Mai’s eyes fell to Ara’s wrapped hand. “What happened?”

“I got shocked and burned from trying to grab him. But he’s worth it.” She smiled weakly. “I’ll gladly keep what ever scars I get for him.”

Mai smiled. “Thank you. I don’t know what I’d do without him.”

Ara stood up, bowed, and walked to the opening. “Me neither.”

She walked out and Mai sat next to Zuko. She held his cold hand.

“She saved your life,” she whispered as she kissed him.

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Just so you know, Ara is Aang and Katara's daughter.

If you'd like to read my ff, here's the link. [link]

Hope you likie!
Avatarone3
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Comments: 23

AutoBot-Refuge [2015-02-14 02:21:24 +0000 UTC]

I must be a terrible person because my first thoughts for his waking lines were"

"How many platypus bears ran me over?  Was it a lot?  It feels like a lot"

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ArchiCrash [2009-01-21 00:29:02 +0000 UTC]

Ah, Zuko let his hair grow out a bit more... He looks nice. Well done.

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Avatarone3 In reply to ArchiCrash [2009-01-21 00:33:57 +0000 UTC]

Well, I didn't think I drew his hair that long, but thanks! he is older!!! Thanks so much!
Interested in reading the whole ff for it?

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Beshflorin [2008-12-30 18:30:23 +0000 UTC]

I like your shadowing...I still need to work on that .. I read the story am so glad it's not Zutarian .. read too many of those already

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Avatarone3 In reply to Beshflorin [2008-12-30 19:17:33 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much! and yeah, just practice practice practice!! And you read the story, or just the excerpt on the piece? but either way, thank you so much!

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Friekie6 [2008-11-27 16:47:05 +0000 UTC]

Wow, that's a great drawing! (I like it that Zuko's not all hairy ) I love Aang and Katara's daughter, she's so cute ^^

And, wow! You are a wonderful writer!

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Avatarone3 In reply to Friekie6 [2008-11-27 16:53:34 +0000 UTC]

Well thank you! I am smiling as I write this!!! heheheh, Zuko's not that Hairy... Yeah, I just kept his hair from season 3, and added a little tuft on his chin. Yep, that's Ara! I love her!
I'm glad you liked my writing too!
Please, if you liked that, check out my story, if you haven't already, at [link] and scroll all the way down to the bottom, and it's called "To Save The World Again" I'd LOVE to know what you think!

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SomeGirlNamedJhenne [2008-11-27 07:33:48 +0000 UTC]

Oooooh, interesting

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Avatarone3 In reply to SomeGirlNamedJhenne [2008-11-27 17:16:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! Are you interested in reading my story?
Oh, and are you still interested in doing t-shirts for the convention?

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SomeGirlNamedJhenne In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-12-02 01:20:24 +0000 UTC]

Sure, do you have a link?
And yes, I'm still interested ^_^

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Avatarone3 In reply to SomeGirlNamedJhenne [2008-12-02 02:36:42 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, the link is [link] and I'd SO LOVE TO KNOW WHAT YOU THINK!!!
Please read!
Also, for shirts, can you send me a note on what you charge? Because to set up in the convention, I don't think you have to pay anything to set up, but what are the prices and ATLA designs you have in mind?

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narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 02:45:09 +0000 UTC]

Awww....I really am working on reading this! I have some drawings for my family I'm doing so hopefully I can get those out of the way soon

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 04:09:12 +0000 UTC]

Hey, take your time! I just hope you liked the excerpt! have you gotten to this part yet? Anyway, you're doing drawings for your family? Like what? I'm interested!

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narniamushroom02 In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-11-27 04:35:21 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes! I really liked this part! ^^ Well, I'm giving a drawing of my two cousins to my Aunt and Uncle and to my other Aunt (actually my grandma's sister) I'm doing a picture of her and her husband when they were younger and when she had her two poodles ^^ and I gotta figure out what to do for my parents and grandparents

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 04:49:21 +0000 UTC]

that's awesome! So do you want me to draw it this time, so you don't have your hands all that full, and you can color it, and we'll switch next time?

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narniamushroom02 In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-11-27 17:12:35 +0000 UTC]

You're talking about the Christmas project thing right?
Well, just whichever you prefer. I'm not that good at coloring but I can try ^^
It doesn't really matter to me ^^

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 17:20:22 +0000 UTC]

Well, you can sketch it this time if you want, and I'll color it, does that work? And yeah, I'm talking about that Christmas project. I'm not that good at coloring either, but I'll try. Whatdya say?

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narniamushroom02 In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-11-27 17:36:18 +0000 UTC]

If you want to sketch it I don't mind. Just what ever you would like doing. Or we could each draw a character or something. I don't mind coloring though

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 17:37:46 +0000 UTC]

Hey, how about you sketch it this time. I'll do coloring! either way, we'll switch! Is that okay?

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narniamushroom02 In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-11-27 17:43:08 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I don't care! ^^ Just whichever!^^ I'll get started on it, it was like a picture of Mary and Joseph like Mary kissing Joseph on the cheek right?

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 18:17:39 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, only how about Joseph's kissing mary, and baby Jesus is in her arms. Also, have at least a donkey and 1 sheep in the stable, and with the star in the opening of the stable. that's not too much, is it?

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narniamushroom02 In reply to Avatarone3 [2008-11-27 23:31:02 +0000 UTC]

That's good! ^^

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Avatarone3 In reply to narniamushroom02 [2008-11-27 23:50:46 +0000 UTC]

Okay then! Tell me when you are gettin' close!

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