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AzialSilvara — Electric Touch
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Published: 2010-12-13 03:45:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 1765; Favourites: 26; Downloads: 17
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Description
Its a feeling you can't understandBut you love it all the same
That sensation flowing from their hand
Sudden sparks that light your flame
The electric touch just drives you mad
It sends shivers down your spine
Sudden surges make your body glad
Gets you flustered like red wine
You can't hide it as it lights your fire
Racing blood flows to your head
Every jolt fills your mind with desire
Wandering thoughts are laced with red
Just a simple touch gets you all riled
Gentle hands often surprise
You enjoy how sparks can make you wild
They can see it in your eyes
Their electric touch just sets you off
You can't help but get excited
Though those around may laugh and scoff
Your hormones have been ignited
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Comments: 42
Maybe it could be? I'm not sure, I see it as a poem. But everyone will see things differently.
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i guess i just hear it because i am a song writer >)
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I've written a couple songs, but even then I write them like I'd write a poem. I just write them in a song format I come up with. C:
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haha interestingly enough, i have written a couple poems, but then i write them like songs!
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Well, one is probably more likely to write in a way they are most comfortable.
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Think so? That's what I like to think. 8)
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I do like the images that you've put in this poetry. There is an intensity to the choice of words and imagery.
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You're most welcome!
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I'm glad to see the finishing touches on this. Azial, I'm submitting this to Everything-Plus's "FEATURED" folder.
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Btw, so people can have some control over the poetry folder again, I made one just for you. It's called "The Poet's Corner by AzialSilvara"
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I'm not allowed to dominate the poetry folder anymore?
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Since you're a major contributor, you get your own folder.
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I'm pleased to see the descriptive features you've added in. The rhyme (and so the flow) is as good as always. Excellent work. I'm glad you decided to try to create a much more uncommon piece of work; it stands out against the others, makes it unique.
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Why thank you!
And yeah, I prefer to do that. Its not very fun to write cliche stuff that everyone writes about. Writing in a different way about different things is what sucks people in.
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Wow I love it ^^ Great Sonnet btw (I believe that's what it's called? I'm currently reading about these types in L.A.)
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Is that what it is? I don't even know.
I just write.
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I believe so considering that each 1st and 3rd line rhyme at the end? I could be wrong >< But i'm learning about it because of Shakespeare poems. Well you write amazingly
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I'm not actually sure. I don't remember most of the proper terms and whatnot. I just go for rhyme schemes. ABAB most of the time. Or ABAC. I like to mix it up.
Thanks.
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Yeah i was thinking about trying it out and reading yours inspires me more ^^ and your truly welcome
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Well done, sir! I love the way the verses flow, and how it's romantic and enrapturing at once. The last line makes me chuckle without taking away from the rest. Faved!
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Thanks for the feedback!
Glad you liked it.
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No problemo ^.^
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This is both romantic and erotic. I especially love it because it doesn't fit into that typical cheesy-romance-mush that's become too boring. Nice job. ^__^
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Good to hear! I like writing things that people will find interesting. Which is why when I decide to write something relative to romance I want it to be unique and not cliche.
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