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Published: 2012-04-06 01:16:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 1857; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 53
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This is eventually going to be my entry for Dooms contest. The rules state that the girl must be coloured and the entry sent to him in a note. I have not done either of those things yet. So this is a WIP until then.Feel free to offer some critique. I'd like to make this a little better before I start inking it.
EDIT: Fixed a few mistakes. I evened up the cloth over her breasts, made her left (our right) foot a little bigger and altered the shape of her braces slightly.
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Looks great so far!
The only thing I noticed is that her whole body seems to be at an angle except her hips are as if she was facing straight ahead. Then again, I could be wrong
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I have a habit of doing that, but I think this one's okay. The curve of the hip on the left as well as that leg being forward seem to indicate that. At least to me anyway, I've not had any proper education on the subject.
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You're right it's not even that noticeable, but you could always make one crotch-line shorter than the other.
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Y'know, I think I'll do that. It's not too late thankfully.
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Ah, Zoey - probably my favorite character of yours (though Aqua might tie or hold a close second)
The only thing I have to point out is the shadow of her right foot. In my opinion it seems to be in an odd place / an odd shape for the place its in.
But everything else is wizard.
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I'm not sure why Zoey's as popular as she is. Maybe it's because she's a bit more attractive or simply because she's been drawn pregnant more than any other character. Still, knowing that Aqua comes in second despite not (properly) having been drawn pregnant is comforting.
Yeah, I think it should be a bit closer to the camera there.
I think you know by now that I am a wizard, or rather, I have a wizard counterpart.
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Did Hagrid tell you this or did you find it out on your own?
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Cute dancin' Zoey, for all to see.
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It's like an animation without adobe flash player
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There seems to be nothing wrong with Zoey, though the background is somewhat vague, but I'm sure it will improve as you continue it. Otherwise, I like.
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Oh yeah, the background's a bit vague. At the moment it's only sketched to give me an idea o
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Well, that makes me happy.
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glad to make you happy firend
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I have to say that Zoey's looking good and I can't really find anything wrong. (I'm kinda bad at critiques and might miss some things. 
Good luck in Doom's contest.
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It's all right. I kind of made the request for critique expecting to receive only a little bit.
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