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IronButterfly4567 [2014-09-14 02:05:50 +0000 UTC]
this sucked me in ...
I appreciate starting with Jesus and ending with Lucifer; When one replaces "good" with QVC because they answer the call so we can place our orders for instant gratification, we discover that always getting what you ask for becomes "bad"... It makes it complete as a story line that we can each fill in from our own experience.
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justpolly [2006-05-27 12:26:54 +0000 UTC]
like it a lot,but there's something about the last 2 lines that puts me off =/
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Misplaced-Karma [2006-04-15 18:22:47 +0000 UTC]
I love the concept, it made me very, very happy.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not opposed to profanity in poetry. Sometimes it makes it perfect. But it doesn't quite seem to flow, here.
Yours,
Misplaced Karma
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Spamuel [2006-04-13 18:04:48 +0000 UTC]
"my call is important" -- fantastic.
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