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Puddled Gasoline
Published: 2012-04-16 03:01:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 4352; Favourites: 173; Downloads: 568
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Hear me read it! Puddled GasolineSomeone left the car on
with the garage door closed again;
mother-of-pearl rainbows
streak the harsh winter concrete
as I breathe past the fumes.
Your son,
forgetful seventeen
at its finest,
blares Grunge
or Punk
or some other form of noise
I'm not familiar with.
He will not hear me screaming
when I tug open the door
and you spill out like a puddle
onto my freshly-buffed shoes,
because I will not be screaming
at all.
For the first time
in almost twenty years of marriage,
you've silenced me.
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Comments: 92
Thank you! You interpreted this piece exactly as I wished it to be; I'm glad you caught all of those subtle hints!
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Wheee! Thank you, hard-ass high school English teacher
If you get a chance, could you take a look at my poetry? None of it is very long.
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I could tell what this poem was going to be about based on what I could see from the preview in your gallery but this is so much better as a whole. The entire story just causes your heart to skip a beat at the end. You wrote this in such a way that it doesn't seem overly tragic, either. I'm not sure if that's based on the wife's reaction or the wording, but either way it was a lovely read. I'm glad you got a DD on this-- it was well deserved.
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Thank you! I didn't want this to come off as overly tragic; I wanted the wife to seem a bit distanced from the relationship, a bit walled-off. I'm so glad it came across that way.
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You're quite welcome. It wasn't overly tragic at all-- the perfect blend, I think. I was actually pretty excited after finishing it to realize the full story wasn't a whine-fest 
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Oh god. This is not what I was expecting from the title...
Your pacing at telling the story through this piece is spot on.
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Thank you. I'm sorry if this piece caught you too much off guard.
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This gave me chills but in a good way. It's an incredibly well written poem with great imagery
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback.
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Gosh. I don't always get around to reading all of your poems because I get so damn much poetry and prose piling up in my inbox, but I'm so glad I took the time to read this one. Incredibly striking. Congrats on the DD!
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Thank you!
I know how you feel; I watch sooo many people! So I understand. I'm glad you enjoyed this one, though!
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Oh my. Lol I just got it. Great work 
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Thank you for reading!
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I had to read this a few times to get it... But when I did.
Woah.
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my name is devin, elisabith :3
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Good wow, or bad wow, or..."I'm disturbed and will never read anything you write ever again" wow?
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Haha, good wow. XD Very powerful.
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Eesh. Way to deal with a depressing subject straightforwardly without coming out and just saying it.
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Thank you. This was an experiment of sorts, and I was playing around with introducing the suicide without actually naming it.
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wow that's kinda disturbing but soooo good! a well deserved DD
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
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was the silence because they seriously wanted out of the relationship and couldnt get you to understand any other way?
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I'm sorry? I don't quite understand the question?
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It seem to be a poem about suicide in most cases they occur due to relationship conflict or lack of relationship. not knowing which way to turn the ultimate give up instead of fight on.
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Very interesting. It confused me at first, but when I figured it out... Ah. Beautiful, yet tragic. I think the worst part was the 'again' in the 1st paragraph. Amazingly written, though
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Thank you so much! You're the second person to say that about the "again."
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Sure ^^ It was saddening...
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Wow. This was very cool. I must admit though, I'm feeling like I don't quite understand what's happening in the poem.
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Well, that's the beauty of poetry, isn't it? You're meant to form your own stories from the words.
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Oh yeah right. Sorry, I don't often read poetry and I sometimes forget that the events aren't supposed to be clearly stated like in prose.
Well, thanks for clarifying. It's a very good poem.
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That's fine. ^.^
And thank you.
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no entiendo todavia el ingles porque estoy viviendo en Alemania y tengo que seguir estudiando el aleman aber si puedo estudiar el ingles luego, si ay alquien que lea esta carta, hojala sea luego, le agradeceria mucho, para poder aprender el ingles en una forma rapida y efestiva, o sino tambien puedo escribir en alemanm espero una respuesta luego, Link:www.dunduland.eu, muchas grasias de antemano
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Thank you for reading it.
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It is my pleasure to appreciate the work of the gifted.
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I wanna say I get it, but I don't.... Please, can someone explain it for me?
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This woman's (narrator) husband committed suicide via carbon dioxide poisoning. You can do this by turning your car on in an enclosed space with no way to get rid of excess fumes, and just sitting in the car until the fumes knock you out and kill you. And this is precisely what he did.
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oh....now I'm super sad.....
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