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Published: 2004-02-17 23:35:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 227; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 22
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i want to be free..?Related content
Comments: 26
vacation sucks huh??? excellent as usual hope it gets better
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Very descriptive, I love it...the only thing i would suggest is that you don't use making and then make (Making you make me just some lies) in the same line, the flow is a little funny there. Otherwise I really love it 
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ahanothe rperson with the issue with making..make
i liked it.... haha
but whatever floats your boat- this time im not changing it like suggested- yeah soemtimes i edit my poems with suggestions (RARELY)
hum
oh well
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I completely understand that, I have such an editing problem...I have to physically force myself to change something in a poem...after I fix the typos that is....
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Once again, this poem has excellent flow. I wish I could make my words as smooth as that. Nice work
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I like this piece. The poem has an intresting message to it. I found it to have a lot of very good emotion in it. I think many other people could easily relate to this piece.
The diction is very good, although the 2nd line of the 3rd stanza is a bit awkward (Making...make...). The flow is pretty good otherwise, and I liked the organization too!
Great job!
Greg!
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hahai liked the making... make
but hey thats just me
ah your comments are always so perfectly excellent, i thank you very much!!
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Thanks!
I was hoping you could read [link] I just wrote it an am curious what people think
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This so sadly beautiful. I don't think it needs much more to be added to it, just something to sign off with I think. I like this a lot, it flows so well and so nicely. Extremely nice poem sweetie 
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yeah yeah another fav from me for holly...
ya gotta be getting bored of me favin your stuff lol
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Its great. Descriptive, yet short and sweet. me like.
-tif
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