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Published: 2013-04-15 19:04:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 3661; Favourites: 69; Downloads: 0
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After long long time here it is, first page of my comic. This story is very old so it will be really simple and naive. I had in in my mind definitely too long and it spread so much, but I plann only few pages to not bore you guys.I'm totally not satisfied with this page mostly because of the text ( I hope it's readable )
Also if you see any mistakes, just let me know and I will fix them.
And it will be nice to know your opinion so any comment are welcome (is it at all suitable for further publication )
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Edit: I put some small white rectangles, hope text is more visible now. Thanks for all who helped!
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I'd love to see more of this, definitely. I love stories [and art!]like this
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Thank you, I really appreciate it ^^
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Oooh a bunch of islands filled with sexy winged men? I'm interested! Heheheh.
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Yup
Nice to hear. Thanks!
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Oh my.... I bow down at your feet for creating such an exquisitely detailed comic page. I look forward to more!
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Thank you so much! I will do my best to make future pages look even better.
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i think labeling it 'simple' or 'naive' hardly does this justice bb. you have a great deal of depth and skill put into this. the story i can already see is built around a moral. fables are rarely meant to be convoluted or overly complex. they are about the moral lesson or social concept one should consider.
i highly encourage you to fallow this project, mostly because i would love to see what morals you find most important. i would also be delighted to see a further expansion on this spectacular landscape and design!
my only suggestion for adjustment is in the text. i see you have the goal of maintaining a gray scale. i have two suggestions for a way to avoid the letters blending with that. the first is two make the letters contrast to the location. you have done that well with the top and bottom section, though the middle would be better visible as a mid level gray. the second option you have is to give small outlines to the words in the opposing color. when you have the contrasting outline, they automatically define on any gray scale. you might be able to find a fount with hallow text you could make black and white.
i greatly look forward to seeing how you expand on this concept. i'll be quite curious to see what lengths it reaches! *U*
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You guessed the whole story after just one page, O_o respect!
Thanks, I only hope that the next pages will be if not at a higher level, at least at the same
Well all the problem about text is because I "see" my story in my mind not "read" so I see pictures and just draw them, then I put text and it's in a wrong places. Have to work on it. And of course the contrast of background and letters. I fix it and I really hope it's better now cause I will have the same probln on next pages.
I don't plan a long story, but more important is to end it. I give up too easily in long projects ^w^
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i have hardly accomplished that, though thank you for the avid praise my friend. ^///////^
i'm a writer and there are certain things you look for in such styles. i don't know what moral you want to teach or what direction you will take to make it, i only saw that it was about far more than the individual characters. i think that is what gave it away for me. ^////////////^
i can surely believe you can do 'higher levels', though i also know few people do full skill on a long visual series. at least, on the first draft. at the same time, i have always admired your dedication to perfection. so i will happily wait. i am sure to be delighted no matter what. it will just be about what i find i love about it most. XD
i think that is a beautiful way to embrace your muse. i know a few other skilled people like that, and i think you should be proud of being able to visually detail on that level. ^^
when it comes to the text, you do have one more option. i suggest posting a text and no text version of this story when you are done. i have no doubt others will be wanting to see it in the same way you do.
well not all stories need a lot of words or images to make them complete. ^^
when it comes to long projects, i am the same way when it comes to my art; so i definitely feel you there. >//////>
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: D
Well, after many changes tha tthis story passed , I think I will be still mainly just about friendship. But I will not reveal more
I hope that I will have enough of motivation to improve further pages
Hehehe quite a nice idea
Yup I agree.
So I'm not the only one
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thank you for leaving me with some mystery for what comes next. i would indeed like to be excited and unknowing about the glory that is to come. P^^p
if you need help with motivation, let me know! i will be happy to cheer you on and prove you have avid fans waiting to see your awesome!
so glad you approve!
i am sure to be one of those people wanting to see it in full myself.
hardly! you are simply human. XD
we all have challenges and different ways of facing them. doing so is a lot of work. it is just about finding the right motivation to make the work worth it. :3
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Hahaha Well, motivate me will be Sisyphean task
Aww So nice to hear ^w^
Yeah I guess you're right
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i can tell that is a joke...but i am no sure i get it. ^////////////^
are you saying you are a workaholic? ^/////////^
was there ever any doubt? XD
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I mean it's really hard to motivate me
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ahhhhh, okay. some of that might be from having such a strong personal will. that can be a good and bad thing depending on the moment. considering what i have seen you achieve so far, i would say a good bit of it is working well for you at least. XD
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Nice! 
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Yup I know. I like this font but I have to make it readable 
Thanks!
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If you outline the text in 1-3px of the opposite color, it will take care of that, without covering up more of your art. Gorgeous art, by the way. Nicely drawn.
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I tried it, but it doesn't work with this font (it cut off all those small details). Maybe I will change it or make white rectangles ect. Thanks so much for comment!
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trying using sai or photoshop with the airbrush. if you just do a small underlying layer with a half level of translucency, it will still show what is beneath well giving a boarder.
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I made small rectangles and blurred them a little. I think it look better now and the whole text is homogeneous black
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awww, and you used the air brush idea too!
i am so glad it worked out so well for you and with such delight. *giggle*
now just comes the waiting for the next page....*tries not to fidget*
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Yup simple white rectangles were too "sharp"/'hard" if you know what I mean.
I hope I will make it soon ^^
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indeed they would be. so glad it worked well! *happy dance*
take all the time you need bb. i am sure it will be done when you are ready for it to be. ^^
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Hehe it will be ready when I find a free time for it
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that makes sense to me! i am finding less and less time for things myself, but i am pretty sure that is my own fault. trying to focus on too much at once will do that. ^////////^
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Heheh for me it's my life which from time to time tries to kill me plus my laziness
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i am hardly immune to being lazy. i think that is half the reason i end up running all over the place to finish everything half the time. ^/////////^
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So we are similar in this case ^^
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The details are beautiful, and I love how graceful the winged people look. :3
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Yay! I want them to look just like that ^^ Thank so much!
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This is absolutely beautiful. I think it will be a wonderful story. The illustrations are breath-taking so far.
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Well I really hope so ^w^ Thank you so much! ^^
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Bajeezle the details ohhh i want to jump right in there and be all weird and try to touch everyone's wings and when they freak out I'll put my finger against there lips, if i can even reach them, and say "SHHHH I'm a artist."
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Hehehe cool idea and even more brilliant excuse 
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It was a inside joke me and my friend had for every time someone over herd something weird we where saying we just said shh we're artist
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I will do my best!
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Oh this is just beautiful dear! Absolutely beautiful! I love how soft all the wings are!
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Thank you so much. Oh and wings are also easily and fast to draw
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It's good that they are easy since you include so many! HEhe! But they really did turn out lovely!
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Yup and they will be on each page so it is very useful for me
Thanks!
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