iheartpirates [2006-02-21 18:51:32 +0000 UTC]
theres quite a few spelling mistakesin this youmight wanna check
i think the 'i see it in your eyes' gets a bit too much, maybe just put breaks in the poem rather than the bold writing,or just put less of them in. i do like the start more than the end,its more poetic, the ending just seems too teenage and cliched
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