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Published: 2013-12-05 20:13:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 2217; Favourites: 48; Downloads: 0
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Name: Emma
Species: Makuhita
Gender: Female
Birthday: March 29
Zodiac: Aries
Age: 81
Nature: Adamant
Characteristic: Somewhat stubborn
Catchphrase: "hyaa"
Job: Childminder, personal trainer
Hometown: Ecruteak City

History:
Emma was born into a family who owned a karate school in Johto. While her brother underwent rigorous training as preparation for one day taking over the school, Emma disliked the traditional female role of housewife and secretly helped her brother with his exercises. She was criticised and shamed by her parents as she continued to stubbornly refuse their visions for her, and on declining an arranged marriage left to live with her brother, who by that time had started a family of his own. His wife disapproved of the arrangement, however, and remained cold towards Emma. Emma helped to raise and train her new nephew, though was never very skilled at housekeeping.

When Emma's father passed away, her brother took over the karate school as planned. His sudden death shook Emma somewhat, as she had always defied him and felt she had let the family down by doing so. Emma became determined to regain her family's favour by instead helping her nephew to succeed, and trained him hard to prepare him for his future role. She was a patient and effective teacher, but never stood for his childish ways and tried hard to refocus his attention and guide him into taking his role seriously. She taught him the combat techniques passed down in her family - those she once helped her brother to perfect - and how to use meditation to hone his perception. Though the training was tough, Emma thoroughly enjoyed the time spent with her nephew as they both grew older, and they would often walk together and enjoy nature's bounty after a particularly stressful session. Moreover, she felt proud of herself for taking a greater role in continuing her family business, albeit in her own way.

Emma's brother had a long and successful lead but, as time went on, and his health declined, he passed the school onto his son. The training Emma had provided her nephew paid off, as he became renowned in the area for his abilities. He always credited this not to natural talent, but his outstanding teacher. For Emma this was enough - his achievements were hers. Her brother knew that he had left the raising of his son in good hands, and could not thank Emma enough for her efforts. He died peacefully, content in the thought that his son would continue to carry the family business forward.

On the death of her brother, Emma's position in the house became unsteady. While her brother's wife until now had quietly resented his attentions on Emma, and disagreed with the way her son was raised, alone she became empowered to make changes in the family. She turned on Emma, claiming that she was always a nuisance and had interfered with her family instead of living her own life, and told her to leave. While Emma had never desired to confront her brother's wife, she defended her position as the cause of her nephew's success, and refused to be cast out like she had been by her parents so many years ago. Emma's nephew, in his efforts to please both his mother and his aunt, suggested that an extension be built onto the family dojo so that Emma could continue to live in the grounds of the school. After some discussion, the pair agreed.

The arrangement remained suitable for some time. The family dojo grew rapidly in size, with many students on roll. However, as Emma became older and more tired she became unable to help train the young students in the school, and began to desire a more relaxed lifestyle. While discouraged by her nephew, and somewhat reluctant to leave behind the legacy she helped create, Emma felt it was time for her to move on. One of her students, whom she had been training for some time, often spoke fondly of his hometown, Pokette, but felt sad that the area was in decline. Sensing an opportunity, Emma decided to investigate the town, hoping that she would come to enjoy a change of scenery and, who knew, maybe even make a difference there.

Before boarding the train, Emma's nephew promised to support her in any way that he could, and so they agreed to write regularly to each other to keep in touch.

Extras:
In her spare time Emma is usually found walking long distances, meditating beneath trees or watching others play games.
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Comments: 33

Cosmic-Eevee [2014-01-14 17:57:09 +0000 UTC]

Her birthday is one day before mine o_o


This is so awesome owo

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oranlarvitar [2013-12-11 21:00:20 +0000 UTC]

Ahh what a lovely character ;w; I just love her.


Noelle and Emma must meet one day! And congrats on getting in!

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brackenhawk In reply to oranlarvitar [2013-12-12 22:40:50 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks

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REINDE-ER [2013-12-11 20:59:50 +0000 UTC]

Oh gosh.


Oh GAH I-


She's so cute! I've never really liked Makuhita as a Pokémon, but you know what?

You've made me like it. So congratulations!

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brackenhawk In reply to REINDE-ER [2013-12-12 22:40:41 +0000 UTC]

Haha thank you I wanted to use a less-popular poke and make it fun!

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REINDE-ER In reply to brackenhawk [2013-12-13 17:28:38 +0000 UTC]

And you did a brilliant job!~ You're welcome.~

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Elen93 [2013-12-09 22:38:33 +0000 UTC]

oh my goodness, she's adorable!

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brackenhawk In reply to Elen93 [2013-12-10 07:22:51 +0000 UTC]

Hehe thanks

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NebulaWords [2013-12-09 18:19:52 +0000 UTC]

Aww,she's a sweet gradma


Congrat on getting in the group ! ^^ sadly I missed the opening because I didn't check OTL

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brackenhawk In reply to NebulaWords [2013-12-09 18:47:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you maybe next time!

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HimeHeishi [2013-12-09 16:12:05 +0000 UTC]

oh my goodness I love her<333

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brackenhawk In reply to HimeHeishi [2013-12-09 17:47:04 +0000 UTC]

Aw thanks

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Kaitanium [2013-12-09 15:28:49 +0000 UTC]

I just love her!!!! I hope we can rp sometime.

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brackenhawk In reply to Kaitanium [2013-12-09 17:46:58 +0000 UTC]

We'll see!

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Kaitanium In reply to brackenhawk [2013-12-09 18:49:26 +0000 UTC]

Lovely~

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Mage-Madisaur [2013-12-09 12:15:45 +0000 UTC]

WELCOME TO THE GROUP!  Also, she looks like a lovely older lady. c:

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brackenhawk In reply to Mage-Madisaur [2013-12-09 17:46:51 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks

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Darkm00nShine [2013-12-09 08:29:39 +0000 UTC]

I gotta say I love this character, like seriously. ^^

All my kudos for the animated app, and specially for making a old character, those are really amazing and somehow underrated kind of characters, welcome to the group, and I hope you see you around. =>

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brackenhawk In reply to Darkm00nShine [2013-12-09 17:46:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, I was looking for a reason to get back into art hopefully she's different enough to keep me interested!

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TamarinFrog [2013-12-09 07:46:04 +0000 UTC]

Aaw, she looks so sweet and it is REALLY awesome to see really old characters! Welcome and congrats!

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brackenhawk In reply to TamarinFrog [2013-12-09 17:45:56 +0000 UTC]

I like to do things a little differently thanks for the welcome!

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Powerwing-Amber [2013-12-09 07:31:49 +0000 UTC]

OMG! I love her! It's nice to see some much older folk here in Pokette! >w<

Also, I must say, I really love how you made Emma's application. It looks like it came from the actual game! She seems like a sweet old lady whose life has been a bit rough in spots, but hopefully that'll improve much in this new town. ^^

Anyway, welcome to the group! I hope you enjoy yourself here!

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brackenhawk In reply to Powerwing-Amber [2013-12-09 17:45:33 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks for your warm welcome hopefully I can do a lot with her!

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Powerwing-Amber In reply to brackenhawk [2013-12-10 01:05:06 +0000 UTC]

I'm sure you can! ^-^ I think everyone is going to love her.

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CreamyKittens [2013-12-05 23:20:39 +0000 UTC]

um question where did u find not animated app ? im joining too bracken and do u read warrior cats?

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brackenhawk In reply to CreamyKittens [2013-12-06 17:45:19 +0000 UTC]

In the group folders, and no.

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CreamyKittens In reply to brackenhawk [2013-12-06 17:52:39 +0000 UTC]

ok thanks and love your animations (want to exchange 3ds codes)

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sIurpuff [2013-12-05 21:09:49 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I forgot.

I think the bottom part of the application is necessary. Interesting thing too, another member has a Flash animation application and they made it so it could flip back and forth like in the game. In the journals, it doesn't exactly say that you absolutely have to have it but it also says that the purpose of it is to display badges so it may be an important thing to keep. I highly recommend to ask the group, if you haven't already, to see if this application is still valid without it. If not, then you may have to find some way to get it on.

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sIurpuff In reply to sIurpuff [2013-12-05 21:12:56 +0000 UTC]

I did some clicking around in case you did add it in but didn't say.

Found it!

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brackenhawk In reply to sIurpuff [2013-12-05 21:12:12 +0000 UTC]

You get to it by clicking the icon on the front, I guess it's not clear.

I'll try to change some things, though apparently I'm running out of time...thanks for your help.

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sIurpuff In reply to brackenhawk [2013-12-05 21:17:39 +0000 UTC]

I figured.

 

Nah, there is plenty of time... well at least to me. I had my app done way before, ahem. But don't worry about it too much, rushing and worrying doesn't mix well. Just do your best and all that jazz. 

 

You're welcome, and good luck~

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sIurpuff [2013-12-05 21:02:42 +0000 UTC]

HISTORY:

 

The first paragraph of the history is good, it is set up nicely.

 

The rest however, I feel is lacking in length and detail making it a little on the short side. While the first paragraph focuses on Emma, the rest drifts on her brother and nephew, in about two spaced sentences each. What you want to aim for is at least three paragraphs, with five to ten sentences that is focused on the applying character. The Extras section tells more on Emma's personality more than it is shown in the history. A possible option, if you want, could be to make a "Personality" section or a "Positives and Negatives" section. The Personality section is obvious, the Positives and Negatives organizes the character's ups and downs in terms of well, personality. It's helpful to make sure your character isn't considered Mary Sue.

 

I suggest adding in more details about Emma's personality, like how she felt towards her brother's wife, surely a character like her had to protest being thrown out? Her nature is adamant and "somewhat stubborn", I suggest writing the history in a way that shows these traits throughout the history. Don't just tell, show. She does seem pretty close to her nephew, so maybe some information on both of the two together can give readers a deeper understanding of their relationship and how Emma interacts with others, not just students.

 

For one last thing, I recommend giving Emma a direct reason to go to Pokette. A small detail, but to me the second to last sentence feels too ambiguous, "a new place to call home" could be anywhere. But what about Pokette drew her in and not say, anywhere else in Johto? 

 

Alright, I think that's just about it.

Good luck applying~

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gyg8424 [2013-12-05 20:34:32 +0000 UTC]

she is one cute grandma!

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