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Description Appala's prophecy

Chapter 2


As I ran away from Carson everything sunk in there were only a few options, turn myself in to a psycho ward, not tell anyone I'm insane, or freak-out as soon as I reach home. Suddenly my phone vibrated so hard I jumped out of my skin. It had Carson's name on the caller Id don't answer I chanted to myself as I ran home. I came up to my drive away in time to see my house be struck by purple lightning a deafening boom exploded right afterwards I screamed as I was thrown backwards into the air. I am so happy I don't have a family that lives in that house or they would be fried right now I thought to myself. I winced in pain when I looked over my shoulder to see ya gaping wound going down my back. How could I tell well, let's just say you know there's a pretty bad injury on you when your brand new white tank top was covered in red. As I stood up I was whisked off my feet I screamed once more but then I looked down to find a giant bald eagle. That's it I said out loud I have completely lost it. The eagle suddenly plunged downwards and once again I screamed my head off. We tore past a gigantic pine and over a giant sign reading Κατασκήνωση στο αίμα ενός δεύτερου, which my eyes immediately changed to Camp Half Blood. The eagle suddenly lurched to the side and I fell to the ground landing on my butt. Someone's hand lowered down to mine and I looked up to see those caramel colored eyes looking right back down at me. I took a hold of Carson's tan arm he pulled me up to the ground and I cried out in pain. "Oh gods sorry I didn't see you were hurt" said Carson. "It's fine" I said "where are we anyways?" I asked him. "Well if you were smart enough to read the sign you're at Camp Half Blood" he said with amusement in his voice. "Well what is Camp Half Blood then?" I asked. "A camp for kids that's parents are mortal then a Greek god or goddess for your father or mother, in this case we know your dad was an offspring of Zeus and he and Aphrodite hit off and wham!" he motioned an explosion with his hands the n gestured to me as he said. " Came you a very powerful and hot demigod".
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Comments: 10

AlexMCopeman [2013-07-15 18:54:29 +0000 UTC]

wow, I have just finished drawing these two

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to AlexMCopeman [2013-07-16 19:08:22 +0000 UTC]

Yayyyy

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Maclafel7 [2013-07-07 22:55:01 +0000 UTC]

Nice! She's so lucky that she's the daughter of Zeus! If I was a demigod I would probably want my parent to be Poseidon, though. I love being in the water.

Once again, I feel this paragraph could be divided up so it's easier to read. I also think that there are some sentences that need commas, like this:
The eagle suddenly lurched to the side(comma) and I fell to the ground(comma) landing on my butt.

There also some sentences that are actually two or more sentences strung together:
As I ran away from Carson everything sunk in(period) (Captial T)here were only a few options, turn myself in to a psycho ward, not tell anyone I'm insane, or freak-out as soon as I reach home.

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to Maclafel7 [2013-07-08 00:40:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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1Hazelgracling [2012-12-08 02:08:49 +0000 UTC]

Who is Carson's parent??

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to 1Hazelgracling [2012-12-08 03:06:07 +0000 UTC]

well it is supposed to be a cliffie

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1Hazelgracling In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-08 04:00:14 +0000 UTC]

You could do a christmas chapter about them meeting their parents on olypus, alos introduced Carson's parent

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to 1Hazelgracling [2012-12-08 04:17:29 +0000 UTC]

hmmm idk it would probably be a special edition/chapter thing :/ and i will note you his parent if you swear to secrecy

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1Hazelgracling In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-08 04:38:06 +0000 UTC]

I solemnly swear I am up to no good "harry Potter" I will tell nobody, not even chiron

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to 1Hazelgracling [2012-12-08 15:30:06 +0000 UTC]

kk i will note u it right now

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