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guava123 [2008-06-22 01:16:21 +0000 UTC]
that is really good!
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dragonslayer126 [2006-04-24 19:08:36 +0000 UTC]
I like this very much, particularly
"He had his fathers wealth
and his mothers worries
He stood with his grandfathers gun
To his temple"
you're a really good writer. Nice imagery.
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Weatherartist [2006-04-13 19:02:25 +0000 UTC]
You have quite a talent for writing here, I must say. I agree with Musiqman in that even though this is a poem, it really has the tone of a story, as well. I like the flow of this work, and how there's a surprise ending. The entire story leading up to the final stanza would have you believe that this man is ready to commit suicide, but he decides not to; very original in my opinion. Most other authors would've made him "bite the bullet".
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BrooksysLittleSister In reply to musiqman [2006-04-18 10:43:45 +0000 UTC]
that really doesnt tell me if you liked it or not... nor what aspects you did and didnt like you now that dont you....
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