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noodlegirl007 [2008-07-31 21:04:45 +0000 UTC]
Okay, I'm only.... a month late in commenting. but anyway. Good Lily vs. Bad Lily is really realistic and amazing. it actually sounds a lot like me.... >.>
anyway. it's quite good!!
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Aryn
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browneyedgirl07 In reply to KogoChiara [2008-07-02 13:31:48 +0000 UTC]
Wow, I read Catalyst, but I totally don't remember what it's about, and I totally was not meaning to, in any way, shape, or form, copy it! O.o
Ahh, the dreaded "that." I teach my little sister and her friends in a writing class, and I can't stand it when they use "that," or "stuff," or "things." *sigh*
Thanks! See ya bye is just completely what they would say. You're right, we all say that all the time! Again, I wasn't really meaning to capture teens there, I just wrote what I thought sounded natural!
Okay, now I really really really have to work on this story, because this is as much as I've written, and I haven't really written more since I posted this. :[
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lapapatte In reply to browneyedgirl07 [2008-07-05 18:09:39 +0000 UTC]
but to be honest, teenagers never really say "I haven't done that event all week." It may be proper grammar but it is way too stilted for much below an academic paper. Unless you can come up with a better noun I would suggest just leaving it as it is.
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