lingkailan [2017-07-26 05:08:21 +0000 UTC]
Hey there, I'm the writer of the story about the Chinese siblings looking for their missing grandfather, remember? As you commented a lot on it, I'll comment you on your self contained story.
I liked it, mainly its quiet ambiance, with only two people in a store and in a house. And I love sunsets, so with the places' description, I had a beautiful brown and yellow hue of colors. The beginning was a bit slow, but right to set the mood. I personally don't like the pirates' stuff, because they were bandits, not adventurers, but you dreamt of it, with a girl from a dream that you used in this. I always wanted to write about something from a dream, but the only thing good for that is the frase "Under an sleeping Sun".
You really can write, so I consider that your opinnions on my story have their value.
One thing: "there’s not much I could do with most them now", shouldn't it be "most OF them"? I had some gramatic isues in my story because English is not my mother language, but it is yours, right?
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