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Published: 2012-04-21 09:54:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 12083; Favourites: 164; Downloads: 105
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(Tim) Tim Victor(Nerd) Kamnerd kerdpol
Two guys run into the shop among hard raining.
Tim: "Phew.."
Nerd: "Thank you for covering me from the rain."
Tim: "No problem. I just ran back from the gym. So, you are the nerd... er that is your name right?"
Nerd: "Yes.And you are the big guy that sleep in the class this evening."
Tim: "Ha Ha Ha sleeping is good for your health. You can call me Tim."
Tim said with a big smile.
Nerd: "I don't think it will rain in this day."
Tim: "And.. what are you doing around here at this time?
Nerd: I just leave the library, there are some books that I borrowed there. Oh no..It's totally soak."
Tim: "Let me see your books.. er.. ANATOMY BOOKS? Do you interest in naked man?"
Nerd: "No! I'm not a kind like that!! You embarrassed me. I just use it for my drawing."
Tim: "Wow really? Are you an artist!?"
Nerd: "Just practice drawing charactor... like a cartoon books. I think I should see these books."
Tim: "Awesome! Is that your ambition? you should be a great artist."
Nerd: "Thanks Tim."
Tim: "Some day I gotta be a great bodybuilder.So, I should do a lot of weight training."
Nerd: "You're doing well Tim. I'm jealous on you that you have a great body."
Tim: "So, you can take a chance on me!"
Nerd: "What!?"
Tim: "I said If you want to draw I can be your model. For free!"
Nerd: "Are you kidding me?"
Thank you to for grammar checking!
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A nerdy guy and a hunky stud. Such an ideal pairing.
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Awesome, a big, hunky jock being nice to the shy, little nerd. Love the bulge in his spandex shorts..
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มูมูเม้นท์ทีไรเราเขินทุกทีไม่รู้เป็นไร XD
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Grammar and spelling was a bit messy. Non the less it was a great story, I liked it! Also Tim is sexy and FTW. :'D
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Thank you! I think it was messy and I also need your advice about my grammar.
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When a character is speaking its best to use quotation marks such as:
"Man that sure was hard work!" Mark said with a large smile on his face. When Nerd is talking you said "Thank you for cover me from the rain." It should be: "Thank you for covering me from the rain." Or to make it less well mannered you could just say "Thanks for covering me from the rain."
Lets see what else where you say "No problem. I just run back from the gym. So, you are the nerd... er that is your name right?" It should be "ran".
I think the problem is you're getting Verbs and Nouns mixed up a bit. This could actually be used for a reference or an example in terms of Nouns, Verb and Adjectives: [link]
I live in the US, so English is my first and currently only language (Hoping to learn many, many more). But even so I still have trouble with grammar and spelling some times. So whenever I'm able to help someone else with their grammar and spelling I'd be happy too.
If you need any help or need any spell and grammar checking every now and then feel free to note me.
The stories that you put with your art are really sweet, funny and sometimes a bit erotic. So I absolutely love them. I've actually witnessed or been apart of things like this so its easier for me to relate and enjoy. So with that being said keep it up.
Sorry for the text wall. XD
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Your text wall scared me ha ha
Thank you for your kindly advice.
I agree with you that quotation marks are better.
I will use them in the next chapters. And cause of my bad english skill, I think I need your hand to recheck it.
When that time comes, I'll send you a note.
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Its okay! And I'll be waiting :3
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