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C-A-Harland — Integrity
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Published: 2015-06-10 01:04:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 1450; Favourites: 34; Downloads: 0
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Description I’ve never turned down a job. Professional integrity, and all that. But even so, when I saw the name in the file, I cringed. At some point in every man’s career, he gets that job he knows is going to make or break his name.

I’d been using this name for a while now, and it had started to get a decent rep behind it. People knew me. Not my face, obviously. I was smart enough to use wigs and contacts; prosthetics, if I had to. A face was too damn valuable, and not so easy to change. Especially if you didn’t go in for all that cosmetic surgery stuff.

But names? Names were easy. Names were shoes that you could slip on and off as needed.

This name was one I’d had long enough that it had moulded to fit, like a pair of hard wearing boots that weren’t so much pretty, as reliable. So I took the job, because integrity is all we’ve got, in the end.

I packed up my gear and went to the address. The client had already said where they wanted it to go down, and how. Made my job easier. Well, I guess it did. Truth was, no part of this was going to be easy.

See, the thing about having a rep, is that you’ve also got to know everyone else’s. It’s not often you get hired to hit a hitman, and this particular hitman was one I knew very well. We’d done plenty of jobs together, me and this other guy. But you can’t let nostalgia get in the way of professionalism.

I got to the motel in good time. Traffic was light, which was nice. I always hated showing up to a job late or stressed out. It didn’t make for good work ethic. I dropped my bag on the bed and sat down beside it, taking out the gun and clicking off the safety. It was a Glock-66. One of his favourites. I think that’s why the client chose it. Poetic irony, or something like that.

Me? I’d always preferred poisonings. Figured it was the way to go. Some people thought poison was cowardly, as though it somehow took more guts to pull a trigger, than tip a vial. Personally, I just thought there was less to clean up. But guns were a tool of the trade, and you didn’t often get to pick your methods. More’s the pity. But then, this ain’t really one of those hobby professions.

I checked my watch, and wondered if the client knew how it was going to go down when he hired the biggest name in the business to take down the second biggest.

My phone beeped; the money from the deposit was through. No backing out now. If you’re going to commit to a job, you’ve gotta see it through. That’s integrity.

As I put the gun in my mouth, I realised that names aren’t always like shoes. Sometimes they’re like lovers. You leave them. You lose them. And sometimes they come back to bite you in the arse.
Guess it takes guts to pull a trigger after al–
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Comments: 37

ClassyNerd16 [2016-01-19 06:30:33 +0000 UTC]

This was a great read, love it!

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C-A-Harland In reply to ClassyNerd16 [2016-01-19 21:04:51 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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ClassyNerd16 In reply to C-A-Harland [2016-01-19 22:12:56 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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TaylorNicoleReed [2015-10-18 21:13:32 +0000 UTC]

I... love this. I definitely did not see that twist coming! This is fantastic!

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C-A-Harland In reply to TaylorNicoleReed [2015-10-18 23:48:36 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I'm glad you thought so.

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Flesh-unfolding [2015-08-28 11:00:24 +0000 UTC]

Didn't see that one coming... I like his voice, and the monologue is just right, I can't really explain why. Confident but not annoyangly(is that even a word?) so? The old film noir feel that I so love? A 'killer' first few lines that make you want to read on. (The very first line was actually enough to win me over).
Great write/read

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C-A-Harland In reply to Flesh-unfolding [2015-08-28 20:06:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. This one was a bit of an experiment for me in terms of voice so I'm glad you enjoyed it

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SilverInkblot [2015-08-25 23:51:32 +0000 UTC]

So, is it one hit man with multiple names, or one hit man with multiple personalities? In any case, neither makes much sense to me as the narrator waited until the money went through before committing to the job, money he won't be able to spend.

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C-A-Harland In reply to SilverInkblot [2015-08-26 01:22:59 +0000 UTC]

One guy, multiple identities (names). And he waited for the money because that was the point of no return. As far as his work ethic mandates: once you've been paid for a job you have to do it. 
He was paid, so he did it.

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keeper-loves-writing [2015-06-28 17:12:35 +0000 UTC]

Well, that was ... diligent.

I have to say, the moment he sat down on the bed I knew what was going to happen, but it's still a really nice plottwist.
And when you re-read the story, the irony and ambiguity becomes even more obvious because you wonder which name he actually is talking about in the beginning whereas while reading it for the first time at this point in the story you only have one option: his current name.

That he uses one of his favourite guns to do the job gave the whole story a quite sad ring. The whole moment when he sits there on the bed and reflects about his different personalities leaves quite an impression. It was also quite striking that he seemed to switch personalities together with his name: The other guy preferred guns, I prefer poison. That made me think, for a moment, that this would make a really good prologue to a fantasy story in which said hitman would only kill some part of his personality with that suicide and afterwards keep on going with some part of himself missing - or even with some more split hitman personalities who try to compete against each other with the aim of being the only one to possess his body. They could manipulate other people into giving the one with integrety the job to kill each other off one at a time ...

I'm sorry, that escalated quickly ... (But I like the idea^^) Back to your story: I like it a lot, his train of thought, the irony and how fittingly you managed to get half a word in at the end of it^^

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C-A-Harland In reply to keeper-loves-writing [2015-06-28 23:03:15 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thank you so much for your comment. It's always enriching to know that someone who read your work had all the same thoughts about it as you

And I love your idea for the fantasy spin off, that's actually an amazing concept.

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KreepingSpawn [2015-06-27 01:01:58 +0000 UTC]

So cunning.
Great twist!
This could be expanded, although it stands very well on its own. But I am curious now of his other identities/jobs, etc. 

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C-A-Harland In reply to KreepingSpawn [2015-06-27 11:11:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It might be fun one day to expand on his life... Or lives as it may be.

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KreepingSpawn In reply to C-A-Harland [2015-06-27 19:17:17 +0000 UTC]

Indeed! I'd like to read it.

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neurotype-on-discord [2015-06-22 17:29:15 +0000 UTC]

ha, way too much professional integrity!

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C-A-Harland In reply to neurotype-on-discord [2015-06-24 11:02:19 +0000 UTC]

No such thing!

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YppleJax [2015-06-22 14:37:44 +0000 UTC]

Ha!  Clever!

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C-A-Harland In reply to YppleJax [2015-06-24 11:02:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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SCFrankles [2015-06-14 17:54:53 +0000 UTC]

Excellent stuff - I love the twist. And that slightly bizarre and surreal feel to the story ^^ The very dark humour of the situation appeals to me.

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C-A-Harland In reply to SCFrankles [2015-06-15 02:22:11 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had a lot of fun with the idea in this one.

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GDeyke [2015-06-13 21:47:11 +0000 UTC]

I actually was suspicious of where this was going right from the beginning (what with the focus on names both in the case of the narrator and the target), but lost my suspicions early on, so the ending still came as a surprise to me. I really like that ending. Very nice twist.

Also liking the focus on integrity here.

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C-A-Harland In reply to GDeyke [2015-06-15 02:23:32 +0000 UTC]

I toyed with whether or not it was too blatant, bur decided it needed to be there for the story to make any sense. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks.

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The-Inkling [2015-06-13 21:34:44 +0000 UTC]

Very amusing, I didn't see that coming at all. It's tricky to do a good twist with smaller word counts, but you handled it well. 

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C-A-Harland In reply to The-Inkling [2015-06-13 21:48:54 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad you thought so

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VeryCr1tikal [2015-06-10 18:51:43 +0000 UTC]

Hmm...
While I don't think that this is as good as Wishes, still ends up being decent. Definitely like the twist at the end, though there are a few points which could have been changed for the better. For example:
He mentions how he always preferred poison. Perhaps you could of worked it into the whole "he's killing himself" thing by him saying something like, "I would of preferred to use poison for this job. Would be much quicker and painless." In general, there are quite a few points where you could have re-written it to work more towards the fact that he knows that he's killing himself.

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C-A-Harland In reply to VeryCr1tikal [2015-06-10 19:32:13 +0000 UTC]

I wanted to be deliberately vague on those points, as the narrator is not allowed to know until right at the end hat that's what was going on. I actually went back and took out a lot of clues like that because they were too blatant.

Thanks for your comment!

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BATTLEFAIRIES [2015-06-10 08:59:05 +0000 UTC]

It would seem like this city's trending homicide problem is

about to sort itself out

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C-A-Harland In reply to BATTLEFAIRIES [2015-06-10 19:32:24 +0000 UTC]

YEEEAAAHHHH!!!!

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BATTLEFAIRIES In reply to C-A-Harland [2015-06-10 19:46:30 +0000 UTC]

 

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Haegun [2015-06-10 02:54:47 +0000 UTC]

Interesting take on the challenge.  I am still wrestling with what I will do.

The earlier part had a sort of updated film noir feel to it, which I liked a lot.

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C-A-Harland In reply to Haegun [2015-06-10 04:20:33 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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billionaaron [2015-06-10 01:28:27 +0000 UTC]

also there's a mistake on the line "If you’re gonna to commit to a job, you’ve gotta see it through." It should read "If you’re gonna commit to a job, you’ve gotta see it through."

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C-A-Harland In reply to billionaaron [2015-06-10 02:19:02 +0000 UTC]

cheers

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billionaaron [2015-06-10 01:23:38 +0000 UTC]

yes it's a really good story. i like how the character monologues about what it's like being a hit man. it seems like something right out of the movie Sin City. you clearly are a skilled writer because the sentences flow. still i don't love the ending. why would someone accept a hit on themselves? it seems unrealistic, but it doesn't ruin the piece for me. overall an entertaining read.

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C-A-Harland In reply to billionaaron [2015-06-10 01:28:21 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I actually found the prompt online and filed it away for later. It was "A hitman is hired to kill one of his past identities" and it seemed to fit really well with this theme. I tried to emphasize how important the job and the rep was to him, to the point that he would rather take his own life than be called a failure.

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billionaaron In reply to C-A-Harland [2015-06-10 01:33:22 +0000 UTC]

hmm that actually does make sense. i feel like you should add to the story and make his obsession to not fail more clear, but maybe others would disagree. i don't know.

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C-A-Harland In reply to billionaaron [2015-06-10 02:17:08 +0000 UTC]

With a word limit like that, it's a bit hard to expland

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