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C3POwn — Deus ex animus
Published: 2012-01-27 01:23:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 426; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 2
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God lies in the mind,Thoughts swirl 'round, ever so fast,
sentences shatter, never to last,
images fade, never to return,
bonds left alone, ready to burn.
If God lies in the mind, in imagination and ideas,
Then how does god not know of the enormous seas,
of voices and screams, unheard and scared,
crumbling under the weight they always beared.
For it is God that lies within our brain,
ignorant and reluctant to hear our pain,
we scream and shout, hoping for a clue,
to the answer for what it is we have to do.
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I'm not going to comment on the whole God thing XD. You've taken a a very definitive stance here and expressed it well (except for a few spelling errors: awnser vs. answer, etc.). The short length of the poem gives it strength; my only complaint is that I felt as if the rhythm stumbled a little on the very last line, which dented the force of the verse. You've defenitely improved since the last time I saw your writing
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i'll correct those spelling orders in a sec
well, it was a bit forced in general, it didn't
flow out like previous things i wrote, but i thought
it was good enough so i uploaded it ^^
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And it is good enough 
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To be honest I was going to comment on here earlier but I didn't want to be caught up in the G-d conversation that seems to have started below. It flowed very well and had a definitive beat to it that carried me through the poem. It made me think more about the state of mind of the narrator rather than the state of G-d in the narrator's mind.
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theh, that's just a guy i philosophize alot with,
he usually has some interesting insight on all sorts of
important subjects ^^
well, i did just write it in the heat of the moment so
my own mind would've sneaked in there more then God
would ^^
to be honest, i don't believe in god, but it was a little
idea i had so i just wrote it down.
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A very interesting idea indeed! I'm rather agnostic myself but I think for someone who doesn't have an anchoring idea about a higher power, thoughts like this would certainly manifest. Despite all our efforts to explain the unexplainable we just simply don't have the answers to everything, and this idea can be very distressing for some people.
What I liked about this poem is how that seemed to communicate to the reader. The narrator appears depressed at the idea that, despite not being able to claim to have the kind of control over their own life that a god would, there is that depressing suspicion that the knowledge is within themselves, and yet completely and totally inaccessible to them.
That's what I got out of it anyway
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to be honest, i don't find that distressing at all, i don't
realy care for awnsers to why are we here or what is our purpose,
i just wanne live my life, do what i like and have fun ^^
still, i rather enjoy thinking philosophically, finding an awnser
to questions like that is well, fun ^^
hmm, i hadn't looked at it that way yet, yes, that does seem like
a rather suitable explanation ^^
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Though you should keep in mind that when I say 'narrator' I'm not referring to the author of the poem, I'm referring to the character who is speaking in the poem. The two can be different, and are often assumed to be so, unless stated otherwise.
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well, that's true, but i've heard many times that by reading
something you often learn more about the writer then what
the writing is about ^^
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What if he's screaming and shouting too?
What if it isn't you, but only him who is screaming and shouting?
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if god is almighty and can do basicly anything, then why
would he be shouting?
if there is a god then the bible or any religion for that
matter has givven us a completely wrong image of him,
what if he's just a man, a person with some power to help
or something, but not the almighty deity we all know.
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The thing about almighty ones is that, well, they're fucking almighty, we wouldn't be able to understand or argue, you know?
It's a fucking dead end when it comes up to this.
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well, if god realy is almighty, then he/she's an asshole,
all this bad stuff in the world and he/she just ignores it.
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I read this some days ago: [link]
(Mysterious Stranger by Mark Twain)
Have you ever read this?
I came to this text because of a movie I saw when kid: [link]
Anyway, I'm mentioning it, because the angel there says this:
""You have answered your own question," he said. "I will expand it. Man is made of dirt -I saw him made. I am not made of dirt. Man is a museum of diseases, a home of impurities; he comes to-day and is gone to-morrow; he begins as dirt and departs as stench; I am of the aristocracy of the Imperishables. And man has the Moral Sense. You understand? He has the Moral Sense. That would seem to be difference enough between us, all by itself."
It'd be interesting. And it would explain why he/she ignores all the bad stuff.
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mind explaining that statement a bit, i don't seem to understand it
very well -_-
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Well, I understand it this way:
In the story, the angels don't have moral sense, they can't distinguish good from bad.
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hmm, that does seem like an original take on the difference between
man and angel, i might just give this story a chance some day ^^
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Have you seen the video link I sent?
That shit scared the hell out of me when I was a kid.
(at that time I was really impressionable, and I was catholic)
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yeah, i can understand that it'd be scary for a kid, but
now i found it rather enjoyable
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