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C3POwn — The Stream
Published: 2012-04-19 23:48:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 340; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 2
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The summerdays went on for years, neverending for this lonely character.If there was ever a day I considered my best, then this one wouldn't
be it, the water flowing ever faster, ever slower, never fast enough.
The red string that extended itself further and further into the distance
had seemed so innocent and playfull, were it not for it's point of origin,
a lifeless husk that one might've called friend some time ago, that I
called friend some time ago.
The deed was over so fast, too fast, a stumble, a knife, a gasp and a sigh
was all that was needed to lead to this , could I have prevented it?
The answer was clear as day yet thick as mud, this question, when asked by
a tearfull face to a friend of loved one, he would hear "of course not" but
when asked to the mind behind the tears, then it would echo throughout my
thoughts "yes".
Now, all that remained in the rubble of this disaster was an empty husk,
never to live or love again, and the corpse of his best friend, floating
down the rapid currents of this stream.
Comments: 7
I really like this, I love the way you've made it like a story
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that was the point ^^
i realy enjoy telling a story with as little words possible
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I like the format. Even though you call it a short story, it feels like a short story-poem hybrid.
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well, i didn't mean to call it a "short story" but rather a short *pauze*
story ^^
it is as you say a story poem hybrid, i enjoy painting a picture and telling
a story with little words and then letting the reader deside what exactly it
was that happened and will happen
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I also liked the bit about the red string. For some reason, I was reminded of the the red thread of fate used in Japanese culture.
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hmm, can't say that came to mind while i was writing it, but yes,
it seems appropriate ^^
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