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colinofferment [2010-11-27 09:52:12 +0000 UTC]
A beautiful and evocative picture! The streak of blood on the fish contrasts with the overall calmness of the scene, and adds a lot to the effectiveness of the image. It's interesting that we're not shown what sort of spear she caught it with. I'm reminded of the way cats keep their claws out of sight, except when actually using them. Or perhaps this Chinese girl has been influenced by Laozi's saying, in the Tao Te Ching, that weapons should not be displayed...
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colinofferment In reply to Cat-girl-aholic [2010-12-05 07:01:46 +0000 UTC]
Whatever the reason her spear gun isn't shown, I think this picture tells its story very well without one.
At first glance we see a girl in a swimsuit holding a fish, then her mask and snorkel, which tell us that she caught it underwater, then we see the wound in the fish, which tells us how.
If you do revisit this idea, with or without visible underwater weaponry, I look forward to seeing what surfaces.
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Elf-Hunter [2006-09-04 20:47:34 +0000 UTC]
Oh, your Leifang looks so yummy(the fish too)! Her innocent expression is truly appealing and her tanned, atheletic body is definite head turner. Her leopard print bikini is so hot that I would burn my fingers if I try to remove them...although, it is definitely worth the try. And the way you did the hair is superb I can almost see every strand. Finally, your CGing skills are impressive as heck! ^^
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kitton [2006-03-31 01:48:44 +0000 UTC]
Whooooaaa man your descs are soooo long ;____; Ok uhm...
Her big eyes are so pretty and cute :3 I really like the soft texture to her hair, again :3 The shadow from her hair and the snorkle are very nice and add depth to the image. The leapard print is a really cute touch and I think it came out very nicely (and soft looking, too!) The background may be a bit flat (as been mentioned) but I really like it. It seems the atmosphere and mood for the piece :3 The shiny texture of the fish is really cute!
My crit is on her hips, though :0 Firstly, I feel her torso is a bit short (but I have a superlong torso so I alway exaggerate that anyway) and her hips aren't quite long enough. Its kind of difficult for me to explain so I drew on your pic (sorry for not asking but its just to prove what I mean better...) [link] I hope its clear :3
Once again its really crit heavy ;3 But I think you did a great overall job-especially with her bright and warm skin colour :3
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liquidshade [2006-03-14 20:58:23 +0000 UTC]
Good work! I like it. First of all, well done on the nose. I agree that you're improving there, and I also agree with your thoughts on the head tilt. It's surprising how effective that can be at changing the girls expression, and it seems to be quite a common pose for Lei, come to think of it. I can see you've tried to get her face looking right by how you've done her eyebrows, and fringe. I try to achieve similar effects in my own work, and Lei's face is one of the hardest to get perfect. She has a certain mischievous look about her. While I admit you haven't quite captured it completely, it's still a good attempt. For the future, try and make the eyes a bit smaller and the lips a bit bigger, and you'll be on the right track I think.
The thing that doesn't quite look right for me is the way _her_ right leg connects with the body. The line comes up a little too high, and curved at the wrong angle, I think. I realise you might be trying to give the impression she's stepping forward a little bit, but I think it'd be more effective if the line was lower and a bit straighter, and less defined. So that her abdomen and the leg are meeting each other on equal terms, if you get my meaning. Otherwise, good work on the fish and her hair is nice too. The water droplets on her body are a nice touch, and necessary I think, for a water-based pic.
I'd agree with Rita about the background. They can be tough alright, and I always tend to rush them because I leave them 'til last, after I've pretty much finished with the girl and just wanna get her out there. A good BG can make a difference though. It looks as though you've drawn it yourself using brushes. Instead, I'd strongly recommend finding yourself some quick little tutorials for elements of the background and any other interesting materials you ever have to make use of, using sites like [link] and [link] The ocean is usually achieved by creating clouds from the filters menu, then adding a motion (I think?) blur for a long thin wave effect. Gaussian blur is also useful for bringing the character into focus, out of the background, and where the ocean meets the sky there, I'd recommend blending them together more, perhaps by softly erasing the edge of the one on the overlapping layer. If you look at real landscapes, you'll see that happens, the further away the horizon is.
If you don't understand some of that, I'll be happy to elaborate. Or you can just ignore me completely of course. Overall though, this is good progress. Some people don't like using fancy Photoshop effects and prefer to stick to their own raw skill with brushes, which is fine too. Both methods take alot of practise though.
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Cat-girl-aholic In reply to liquidshade [2006-03-16 04:13:14 +0000 UTC]
Thanks much (again!) for your detailed and helpful feedback! I've looked over the background in this picture quite a bit and I'll admit I've got to be just as critical about it myself. Thanks for the links (did a quick search for "ocean" and found one right away that looks very good!) - it'll take some time to digest but now that I've become more demanding of my artwork any resources out there will definitely come in handy. I'll also say that I need to stop treating backgrounds as an after thought - I've been slowly changing in this regard, but I definitely didn't give the background here as much effort as I did the figure. After thinking about it, that's what's been bugging me about it...but I also figure that once I get used to putting more effort into backgrounds, it will get easier to create them.
As for her leg...yeah, I think I see what you mean. That was one part that I actually did the shading twice as I found I had to rearrange some bits of her mid stream. For future works, I'm going to have to try to restrain from doing any shading until I'm sure all the anatomy is in the proper place...though once I start coloring one part it's hard to hold back. I actually did want to reduce her eye size and enlarge her mouth...but somehow that slipped from my mind. I need to also start getting in the habit of typing out lists of edits/changes needed once I get a picture to a certain stage of completion - I did that for "Elegant Beauty" and was quite helpful.
This was a fun pic to work on...and in retrospect I think Lei Fang is the best character to use in this type of picture...except for maybe Hitomi - those two seem to have a more playful persona than the rest of the cast. Thanks again for your feedback - it's very helpful, especially since I'm in a phase where I want to make some significant improvements.
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c-force [2006-03-14 05:22:33 +0000 UTC]
Hmm... I think Tomonobu Itagaki should lower Lei Fang's hair in the next DOA game. Anyway, great job on this one.
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Cat-girl-aholic In reply to c-force [2006-03-14 15:04:55 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I love Lei Fang with her long hair free and flowing - that's one nice thing I liked about DOAX was it let you alter their hairstyles (though there's lots of ugly clipping in certain poses). Thanks for the comment!
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