Comments: 16
Maman-Ourse [2012-05-31 17:36:42 +0000 UTC]
Shepard! T__T
Great job!
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liquidfire101 [2012-05-31 00:42:29 +0000 UTC]
Oh man what a cliffhanger! Cannot wait to finish this story. Brilliant work!
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Big-Wired [2012-05-30 23:09:06 +0000 UTC]
OKay, first, technically, that was a very good job of bouncing between different times and perspectives. It's hard to handle that kind of thing, but you did it very well.
Secondly... god DAMN IT, you're making me cry here! First that speech from Javik about how right Shepard was and then everyone standing there and watching and just... good lord, why don't you write for Pixar? They're good at making people cry, you're good at making people cry...
If I have one bit of criticism, it's that I would have liked to have seen more mentions about what races were holding station alongside the Nightengale. You did leave it pretty open to interpretation so I'm imagine Rachni, Quarian, Geth, even Bataraian ships just hanging out there, showing what support they can.
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stacey1981 [2012-05-30 21:51:42 +0000 UTC]
It's an interesting concept to ping-pong between flashbacks and reality, but you handled it deftly. Another enjoyable piece and I'm anxiously awaiting for the third installment!
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stacey1981 In reply to celticknotgirl [2012-05-31 03:08:00 +0000 UTC]
My dear, anything you craft is going to be fabulous!
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