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Valkyan [2015-07-26 20:34:29 +0000 UTC]
I'm crying ...
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JessGaskell [2014-06-04 15:56:06 +0000 UTC]
OMG I've read a lot of ME fanfic, some very sad and well written ones but this is the first that made me properly cry, not just well up, but properly sob!!!
There's a 4 right? Please tell me there's a 4!!!
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Buzzz1 [2012-06-17 11:19:00 +0000 UTC]
o boy (uh.. girl.. ) , i had some anxious moments reading your story.
look.
we all know by now you are so fond of liara, sarah and what they have, you'd never NEVER end either one of them.
you know what i think is a pretty big achievement?
you've written it like this is all hanging by a thread, and i really am in despair.
thinking: o noo noooo, hang in there!!! don't die on liara, don't die on us! this can't be happening! no no no! o pleaseee no!
how can this take a turn for the better... ever!?!?!?! o my god, even the characters are giving up on her... this is bad. why is this happening? stop writing! i've got to stop reading!
and then we're inside this beautiful memory. and all seems right. and i know the're love is undeniable, unbreakable, and sooo deep, profound and intense!
and then we're back in the icu. nooooooooo!
it's one big emotional rollercoaster, i give you that.
so. in fact you are a professional storyteller. right?
and you applied for the job at bioware. right?
and they said no, because they would rather blow up shepard in the end and leave us all puzzled (but actually thought: o no, she's way out of our league!). right?
i love your stories! i love your writing!
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SithiR [2012-06-03 20:24:23 +0000 UTC]
YES, finally, somebody who gets it. For one thing, you were aware of and you admitted one of the most refreshingly wonderful, entrancing things about Liara -- when I'm "with" her, there is somebody who feels to me as learned and kind and intelligent and curious as I am. No more sad-alone clinical depression when I am "with" her, when I think about her. Your previous chapter actually came out and admitted that Liara is smart. Most people leave this out, so that it feels sexist when they leave it out.
The other thing -- when Javik said "She did it all for you." I had no proof that anyone other than myself had felt that way before. But after Liara and my Zhenia had met, yes. Absolutely. Not a shred of doubt in my mind.
Does your Sarah start to feel amorous every time she glimpses Liara fighting, and is the reverse also true? It certainly does for Zhenia, because it does for me as the player.
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SithiR In reply to celticknotgirl [2012-06-04 02:07:26 +0000 UTC]
Oh, awe too!
Perhaps there will end up being a proffessorial Chair named after her at the place she went to school (U. of Serrice). People will vie to be honored as T'soni Fellows (Sisters?) in Archaeology.
Or, there may someday be a Liara T'soni Center for Intelligence, as our Central Intelligence Agency has its internal Center for Intelligence, very much like a (controlled-access) graduate school, named after George H. W. Bush. But I consider this latter possibility rather unlikely, because she was never a serving intelligence officer for her government.
How many died there, in her home place? Will greater happiness ever return to my dear one's home? Across a world, how many live after the War? A few thousand? Fewer? Sad doesn't even begin to cover it. Do the Republics have civil defense networks? The subways, like the massive protection level of the Moscow Metro? Do they have undersea habitats and immense city submarines? I think the Alliance must have some truly wonderful submarines, making today's Virginia Class look like the tinker toy of a demented child. I say this because it would be very hard to find and hit a good submarine with an orbital bombardment. The water conceals it and absorbs so much impact energy.
But the Asari ... their submarines must be absolutely awe-inspiring. They are water beings! Liara "told me" that the root word is asyárriyh, "dappled ones," as of the sunlight on the water, or in the forest, or on one's body when the sun breaks through the window ...
My Shepard loves Liara so much, she learned Liara's native dialect. Can you see the intent look Shepard has, studying? I tried to draw the glyphs for Liara's name, I imagined how "Liara had taught me" -- but my attempt to draw her name didn't turn out very well. She says to me that liara is the mythological archetype of the "serene bird" which they have among their people. t'soni signifies "of or relating to the miners," "of the clan of the miners." She says to me that for formal occasions one adds aile'Benez, "offspring of the brightness." Of course, no word for "son" is present. I suppose they must now have an offworld loanword for "son."
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celticknotgirl In reply to SithiR [2012-06-04 02:47:19 +0000 UTC]
Wow! There is so much material in these five paragraphs. I think you should take it and run with your own FF of the Asari or Liara's future. I think it would be very detailed and interesting if you did.
I think there are at least millions still alive. It took the Reapers hundreds of years to wipe out the Protheans. Seems like they wipe out the cities first, but then you have milions more living in the country-side that are harder to find and get to. (my thoughts only.) I never even thought of undersea habitats. That would make a good story, also.
I had to laugh, thinking of my Shepard sitting there concentrating, the tip of her tongue sticking out the side of her mouth as she bent her mind to it. Too funny.
In all, very interesting, you could write a very intricate story with all this. I'd like to read it.
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SithiR In reply to celticknotgirl [2012-06-19 08:03:07 +0000 UTC]
Her name is Zhenia, "hospitality," and her surname, Pastushkova, is the feminine form of Shepard. It is awkward to constantly have to explain that your name is hospitality. So, in English-speaking countries, she uses "Jane." Russians don't have middle names, they use patronymics instead, to which the women then add -a on the end. So, in English-speaking countries, she uses the middle name "Eleanor" (Hannah's middle name, Commander Shepard's mommy's mommy's name). Hannah is also a registered nurse.
Russia has a monarchy again by that time, but it is constitutional, which is unprecedented. The Tsarina's voice-only message -- the Protectress-General of All Holy Russias, their Colonies, and Appurtenances -- the message is going to be wracking, towering, blood-curdling. "To the profane and godless Abominations who slaughter billions of our citizens, whose names will be written only in ashes and spoken only in Hell ..." Stalingrad doesn't even come close. I imagine the warriors from India in the Siachen Glacier fighting the Reaper ground forces. I see Ghurka fighters screaming in rage. I see the British leader quoting Churchill. I hear the words he chooses. I see the Pact of Islam fighting the Reaper ground forces, and the War of Ten Thousand Martyrs. I see the asari, with their immense city submarines and their undersea habitats and their ballistic missile submarines lancing second-strike missiles into orbit. I see Zhenia, a polyglot, who speaks Russian and Serbian and English and Karshamai Batarian and Quebeçois and even has a *perfect* command of Liara's native dialect.
For CAN YOU DREAM OF EVEN ONE BILLIONTH OF HOW MUCH ZHENIA LOVES LIARA UNTO DEATH AND PAST IT? Every time she has killed, since she met Liara, it has been in Liara's name. When she thought Liara had been killed, she tortured the shadow broker's troops to death, bit organs from them and threw them on the ground, severed their limbs while they yet lived, turned insane, became aroused by what she did to them. Jack was terrified of her. Samara, controlled but icily just as enraged.
This from a Paragon.
Then Zhenia wept at what she had done. Drenched in blood, smearing Liara with blood of many different colors, kissing her, kissing her, collapsing against her, sobbing and mewling and kissing and loving, speaking in Tyann'asyárriyhha. "I'll never, I'll never ... never ... never again ... so sorry ... for ... I thought ... "
"I would have done the same thing. Dear, dear, dear one. I'm here. I'm yours. i'm here. I am alive. There, there. It is ... rage is in sentience, ever-beloved. For in water and in fire is the spirit forged."
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celticknotgirl In reply to SithiR [2012-06-19 08:30:32 +0000 UTC]
Wow! That was...intense. I really think you should write out a formal story. I've seen some of the very well thought out near-stories in replies to others. You have a singular talent and imagination. I really enjoyed the entire back story on Russia and the references to the historical stubborness and valor of past generations. This could...no, should be written into a story. Please!
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SithiR In reply to celticknotgirl [2012-06-26 23:37:57 +0000 UTC]
Not now. Can't do that. Too busy with other things. Unpaid internet contributions of two realistic but imaginary vehicles, for those who like to play the pen-and-paper roleplaying game "The Morrow Project." Post-apocalyptic humanitarian aid game. New edition game coming sometime reasonably soon. Game's makers are company called "TimeLine Limited." Since I have autistic tendencies, have a high-functioning learning disability, and I am not a so-called neurotypical, I have significant special and "unfair" advantages. One of them is the ability to evaluate disasters, emergencies, and outbreaks of violence with total emotionlessness whenever needed. "Okay, suppose that a nuclear explosion occurred? How would I go about helping? First, there would be ... and one would need ... and what the government would do, according to the contingency plans we know of, would be ... " But on the other hand, I have trouble admitting certain errors, get lost easily, get obsessed with sounds, have sensitivity to light, can't recognize faces hardly at all, get depressed, have problems with selfishness and lack of empathy because part of me forgets that other people have their own minds and keep existing after I leave a room, etc.
I have lots of physical therapy and a taxing job in a chocolate shop, and stuff like that. Please don't comment about how chocolate shops must be fun all the time, it's mostly just muscles firing, things happening, objects moving. It is just a job. And, because there are times when my emotions suddenly switch off for no reason, therefore I can be a miserly and greedy person. I have the job because I want the money. I look down on people because they admit that acts of terrorism cause emotional stress, and that victims of terrorism cannot just go on as if nothing had happened. I would rather get shot than not know the answer to a question on a test. For me, the hardest thing in the world is to face the situation where "I studied, but I don't know the answer."
Part of me hopes that you yourself will be inspired by what I have said, and that because of me, you will get your own inspiration for some story that you would not otherwise have written. However, I couldn't admit this because it might look bad.
Here's one thing. In Mass Effect, Cerberus killed the Pope. If you do not know, you can look in the Shadow Broker's files. I am not Catholic, but this is totally unspeakable. No matter how many disagreements one might have. I thought before that the Illusive Man might someday support us, repent, and have a good soul again. I thought he would support us in ME3. I used to be angry and disappointed that the plot line had the folk of Cerberus driven into madness and opposing us. I still am, but now, it is mostly because it is sad. I thought he would give us Cerberus combined arms forces following our orders -- air/space wings, black sky vessels, mecha, bots, tele-ops, infantry, whole package. I thought he would help. I imagined Shepard as the Illusive Woman, successor to the Illusive Man, forging Cerberus into something good and righteous. I saw her saying that the Cerberus vessels were to fly on THIS course, bombard THESE coordinates, make the assault in THIS manner. I said, "Win. And someday, we will see Aria bound over for trial, and we will bring artists and peacekeepers and civil engineers to help Omega, and put Samara where Aria used to be." Samara said, in ME2, that she was thinking of returning to Omega for some time so that she could help. And then, we will bring about what Arcangel was trying to achieve. It is a failed state there, Omega is a failed state, much like the present Somalia, Colombia, or Sierra Leone. What must righteous people do, when we see such things? We must keep helping. Help them uplift themselves. Then, we have a new reformed place from which we can consolidate relief assets and help others, branching out from Omega.
So, I say the sitting Pope of the year 2186 actually called a crusade, a real crusade, against Cerberus and against the Reapers. He was not kidding. He actually proclaimed it, and it was not a metaphor but a literal urging and directive. The first such in NINE HUNDRED FIFTEEN YEARS. Counting Catholics living in extra-solar locations, it may have been a million or more people who went to fight. The Pope stabbed an indoctrinated assassin to death, in self-defense. He said he didn't care about his own life. Next, did the Pope resign, the first one ever to resign? Did he go and fight himself? In breach of the 1815 Council of Vienna, hundreds of Swiss Guards left the Vatican. He stated that prohibition was not valid anymore. They went with his blessing. The Swiss guards poured out and they went fourth with other devout Catholics and they fought. Zhenia is not Catholic, but I don't know if she's a Russian Jew or an Eastern Orthodox person or a Subbotnik.
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lololwot [2012-06-02 00:30:23 +0000 UTC]
you just keep on delivering amazing posts,the characters are incredibly well written, incredibly compellig story and an amount of feels that you seem to nail (and improve) each time!
cant wait for part 4!
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metaloman88 [2012-06-01 23:59:37 +0000 UTC]
Amazing!
I love your work, it is well written, well worded and very emotional and emotionally engaging, your stories never fail to bring tears to my eyes. This series as well as your other works are just brilliant in my book.
Looking forward to more of this story! And thank you!
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CrazyGreggy [2012-06-01 15:33:48 +0000 UTC]
2 little latin phrases seem appropriate here.
Amor omnia vincit
Dum spiro, spero
Hold on, you two.
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CrazyGreggy In reply to celticknotgirl [2012-06-01 22:04:55 +0000 UTC]
More or less, aye. Usually accepting meanings are
Love conquers all
While I breathe, I hope OR where there's life, there's hope
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celticknotgirl In reply to CrazyGreggy [2012-06-01 22:14:20 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! Cool phrases, I may use them sometime!
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Big-Wired [2012-06-01 04:57:36 +0000 UTC]
... STOP MAKING ME CRY! ;_;
Again, you are just nailing the characters of both Wrex and Grunt in their interaction, and the final salute from the final Prothean was simply amazing and powerful. The pain that everyone is feeling is just so heartfelt and right for their characters, and not in a shallow, angst ridden way either.
I like how you mentioned as many of the other races as possible, and I have to wonder just what role the Geth are to play here. Hell, I'm just happy to see the Geth at all, since that BS Red energy beam was said to have wiped out all artificial life.
Will we see the other memmbers of Shepard's crew from Mass Effect 2? I know that Miranda is off with her fighter squad and that Jack is tending to her class of biotics, to be sure, but I imagine that they'd race to support their commander as soon as they were able.
You are a frigging amazing writer.
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SaintWalker1806 [2012-06-01 02:38:12 +0000 UTC]
Nice work! I'm enjoying these chapters!!! I can't wait to see what you do next!
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