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0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-25 23:22:33 +0000 UTC]
WHOA.
Okay, this is good.
REALLY good.
Sure, it could use a little refinement and the grammar in paces needs a bit of work, but DAMN!
I haven't seen much Dead Space, but this makes me want to see more.
On to Part 2!!
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-25 23:47:12 +0000 UTC]
Very yes.
Description helps a LOT in stories, though there are points where the theme "less is more" comes into play.
Like describing a character's appearance.
I've seen too many people start off a story by intimately describing every last little detail of a character's appearance, and totally forget about the character's personality.
Ticks me off when that happens...
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 00:11:14 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, that happens sometimes.
You know Ray Bradbury?
He likes to describe stuff, too.
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 00:55:43 +0000 UTC]
I know OF Ray Bradbury.
Haven't read much of his stuff, though that's mainly due to me be a lazy f**ktard whose afraid of driving.
LOVE cars.
Terrified of driving.
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 02:30:07 +0000 UTC]
Kinda the same here, except I haven't gotten to drive yet.
Ray Bradbury is the author of Fahrenheit 451 and The Martian Chronicles.
You should read Fahrenheit 451 first, it's very good.
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 04:39:44 +0000 UTC]
Oh, THAT Ray Bradbury!
I did an essay on 451 in 11th grade, I actually kinda liked the book.
I think I might even have it in my personal collection, though I can't recall at the moment.
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 04:57:55 +0000 UTC]
I really like that book, and as you know, he likes to describe things a LOT.
I just read it in my very first semester of High School.
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 05:14:05 +0000 UTC]
Really?
Freshman year, and you're reading that?
I'm impressed.
^^
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 05:16:32 +0000 UTC]
Really?
What did you read your Freshman year?
I also read To Kill A Mockingbird and Night.
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 19:07:36 +0000 UTC]
I read To Kill A Mockingbird.
Also The Great Influenza (which made me physically ill).
But most of my freshman year was spent just trying figure out WTF I was supposed to be doing there.
Not my greatest year, I'll admit.
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 19:13:58 +0000 UTC]
Eh, mine was okay; I've had better school years, but I think I'm off to a smooth start with High School.
I liked 4th grade the best, though; my teacher was the coolest teacher evar!
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 19:23:20 +0000 UTC]
Sweet.
I think 3rd grade was my fav, mainly because the lady teacher I had was really nice and her main lessons were all about cooking and food and the cool things you could do with everyday objects.
We also did a play and a whole big thing on Egypt...
I was AWESOME.
X3
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 19:27:33 +0000 UTC]
My teacher wasn't just a teacher; he was a friend.
He liked to talk to us at the beginning and end of the day, and he liked to play music and other stuff.
I guess he was like your 3rd grade teacher a bit.
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 19:29:05 +0000 UTC]
Awesome.
I love teachers like that.
It's one of the reasons I still keep in contact with my wood shop teacher from 8th grade.
He's awesome, and he's really nice.
Even though he's retired now and moved to Iowa, we still keep in touch.
^^
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 19:31:19 +0000 UTC]
Oh crap, I just remembered: I never visited my 8th grade teachers last year!
Shite!
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 19:37:02 +0000 UTC]
I forgot to, and I had homework and band events and dates etc., etc., etc. Damn, I feel like such a douche!
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-26 19:54:30 +0000 UTC]
I wouldn't really start to worry about it until Junior year. That way, you can get a couple fun years in without having to worry, and then you start the paperwork in the 2nd semester of Junior year to ease into the process.
Something I SHOULD have done, but when you transfer schools in the middle of classes, it doesn't usually work out all that well.
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 20:03:01 +0000 UTC]
Ooh, I HATE transferring...
I had the first half of my 2nd grade year in the MOST impersonal school I've ever seen.
Geez, everybody was so stuck up there, and the art teacher sounded like she just got back from a 30-year smoking break!
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-26 20:07:57 +0000 UTC]
Yeah...
My sister is still hooked.
She smells like them whenever she comes home, and she FUCKING SMOKES AROUND HER KIDS!
BULL-F***ING-SHIT!
She's an unfit parent!
...Not that her ex's were any better...
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-27 00:26:20 +0000 UTC]
How long do you think I should make this story?
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0ArmoredSoul0 In reply to chewtoy25 [2009-06-27 00:29:56 +0000 UTC]
As long as you want it.
As long as you have inspiration.
It's your story.
Your choices.
^^
Isn't it fun?
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chewtoy25 In reply to 0ArmoredSoul0 [2009-06-27 00:51:47 +0000 UTC]
Seriously, that's what it looks like whenever I write!
Even I'm surprised!
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