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La storia m'intriga motlo aspetto con (im)pazienza il continuo.
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Sono felice che interessi :3
Grazie mille
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Sai parlare l'Italiano?! Wow!!!!
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Finalmente trovo qualcuno che é d' Italia!!!!!!!!
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"A great war broke out. The people of darkness attacked the Psychic types ferociously. The Fire types came down from the mountains to help out in the fight..."
I'm not sure what you were trying to say with this third sentence in the first panel, but I'll take a guess as to what it was and how you could write it. Again, not sure what you were trying to say, so maybe you can clear it up with me. But based upon what you put in and what's happening this is what I could recommend:
"But the shadowed orb that the brother had with him held the secrets of the dead, allowing him to attack using their power and spirits."
"Despite the fact that the two siblings' army outnumbered their opponent's, they found themselves at a disadvantage. Their beautiful land may have been stained with the blood of their valorous allies, but they refused to surrender."
"Recognizing the two siblings as valiant protectors of their territories, the Fairies and the Dragons alike offered their powers to defeat the enemy."
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I was just trying to say that the zoroark (the shadow of the younger brother) had the orb that allows him to use the power of the ghosts, I'm very sorry if it's so confusing.
Thank you very much for the help, as usual çwç
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That's fine, I understand! Since you explained it a bit more to me then maybe I could help a bit better. You could try say this instead,
"The Zoroark, now a shadow of the younger brother, held the orb that allowed him access to the power of the ghosts."
That would work well enough I think. The other stuff I said before is just the stuff to edit and clean up too in this page.
And don't worry, again, I just like to help. ^w^ Like I said before, I really good with English and love writing and reading. So if I see that I can help with stuff like this where there's a little grammar error, a misspelling, or even just the sentence is a little off or wonky, I like to give some support if the person won't mind it. c:
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Thank you very much as usual :3 I fixed everything
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Ah, nice! Just change "recgonise" to "recognize" and you're set. ^w^
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welcome cant wait for the next one
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OOOOH! That's such a clever way of using type advantages in pokemon mythology! Plus this whole thing just feels like an actual ancient story to explain the aspects of the world.
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thank you very much for your compliments :3
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