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chocolateisgood β The Aristed
Published: 2006-04-18 01:11:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 639; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 11
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Tears to ashes, ashes to liesTime to say your last goodbyes
Spread your wings, whatβs done is done
You gotta fly to the darkened sun
Nothing to fear but fear itself
And yet I fear to seek myself
But in the water of the Aristed
It seems yourself you fear unsaid
But unsaid or spoken my voice unheard
By those who shot the mockingbird
And though I dread the battle ahead
I cannot hide from what lies undead
But oh, look, the sea! So blue; so true
That the birds, the fish, do not undo
The peace by rapping, tapping, or splashing
Or cut the air by such rapid gashing.
Comments: 28
Figure it out. I like to think that it will mean something different to everyone, but that's mainly because I wasn't sure what I was writing about.
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yes! I love not being sure what I'm writing about! unfortunate when people ask though. this is awesome!
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I rarely know (when it comes to poetry) what exactly I am writing about hehe.
Thank you!
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Wonder why that is...
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Tis a mystery...
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Ha... wow this is cool! I like you rhyming a lot! You're a pretty god poet... can't wait to read your other stuff!
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Thanks a lot!!
Sorry it took a while to reply, I'm on vacation.
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Ur welcome!!
Oh... heh yah I understand. In fact... I'm going on vaca. soon as well!!
I hope ur havin a blast!!
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Thanks, had a lot of fun. Hope the same to you!
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This poem is awesome... there were a few small errors though...
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thanks for the comment and fav!
what errors?
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ok, maybe not a few, I think I mixed up a word, hehe, I wasn't wearing my contacts!!!
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anyway, what are they?
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Love the cadence, it's like a chant.
Reminded me a of a fiddler o.O
the first line on the last stanza is wicked.
hurrah.
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That's seriously cool.
And, just because someone thinks some of it doesn't make sense, doesn't mean it doesn't make sense.
Sometimes it's personal.
Sometimes it's not.
Sometimes it's just awesome.
Either way, I like this a lot, enough to comment.. And I guess you already know it's awesome since you say it's one of your favorites!
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theres a few mild errors in this, but you have a good way with words
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thanks. and thanks for the fav
what errors??
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someof it makes no sense, some of it is a tidbit outta rhythm but thassall.
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yeah, i know. this is one of my favorites
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