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ChocotanYuu β Nightmare - Obsessive Love, ENG version
Published: 2012-06-27 18:50:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 725; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 28
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Prologue: "Nightmare" (you're here)β’ Chapter one: [link]
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Thanks for seeing 'Nightmare, obsessive love'.
It's just a prologue, so I think I don't have to comments a lot.
I'm so sorry for terrible art
(I HAVE to buy a Ipad to make a digital art )
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Your art style is great, but the use of pencil work makes it seem somewhat sloppy. Personally I found that the combination of photoshop elements (a more affordable version of the program) and a graphics tablet would be very useful, but that's just me.
Another idea to consider is using pens for the line work; going over the pencil in ink and rubbing out the pencil lines. I recommend visiting your local art shop or looking online for pens designed for comic work.
Also you could use some more work on the backgrounds. The chandelier seemed somewhat rushed.
However the pacing and character design is fantastic. I hope my advice helps and look forward to seeing more of the story.
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First, thank you sooo much for the critique.It's very important to me = )
I confess I draw all this drawing in doodle version. When I drew I don't have a intentiono to made a comic. But you're right, I mixed photoshop elements =/ And also you're right about tablet, I agree with you.
Actually I have some pens, a good material to make a well comic/manga. And I'm trying to tweaking with them. = ) It's very dificult for me, but it's going on ^^
Yes, I'll try to draw backgrounds.
It's still looks so complicated, but I'll try.
Thank you so much for the critique and for the compliment. Of course your advice helped me!
Recently I finished another comic, but with pen line. I think I'll submit as soon, and I'm waiting for you critique again = )
Thank you so much, monsieur ^^
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Don't day it's terrible art.
Just looking at glance, I really love it. I think this story shows some kind of forbidden love?
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Seriously, mademoiselle? Thank you
Maybe it can be. Demon has a sick love for a woman who doesn't love him, and he tries all the way to achieve her - even with the use the force.
Yes, it can be ^^
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do you are making a manga or something? hhaaaaa but looks like when i have a nigthmare i understantd the fealing of that
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Yes, I do.
But not a completly manga. Is very simple version, in my case I just use a pencil ans eraser, I don't use pen or ink ^^'
Yes, is terrible, isn't it?
It's the worst way to you wake up D :
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it coould work beter if you try with something more and experiment with youre talent maybe intead of ink you could used penΒ΄s just black or colored penΒ΄s, i do that sometimes and working with ink its like watercolor-paints and its soo amaising that you can do a manga kip working on it and i hope to see it complete one day
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Ahaha.
I'm submiting a next part of this comic right now ^^
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wowΒ‘ now i will see your art
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lol umm... why is she saying "arf"? XDD I think she would be saying "huff" and not the sound that a dog makes XDD
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Oh, really '-'
I think I 'wrote' 'arf' because brething hard sounds in portuguese is arf ><'
I'm changing right now. Thanks!
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