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Published: 2011-05-23 20:19:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 152; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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Description Cameron Siatkowski
October 7, 2010

Incandescent Autumn

The leaves rustled and swirled around my feet,
As the jumping-notes danced around my ears,
I increased my speed,
The ambient-enjoyment grew louder,
There is a solid-chill in the flowing breeze,
I gritted my teeth as I approached the shaded-trove,
The electric-silence calmed the air,
I took one more step,
I raised my ivory-limb and waved,
The coarse-crowd stood quiet,
A bearded man stepped forward,
"Let the hell-chimes ring aloud!"
He projected this message to the mass,
As droves of absent minded humanoids lifted me into the air,
I yelped, but only for a moment;
The bouncing-beats had returned,
The air thickened with laughter,
I was warmly welcomed by this party of outcasts.
I will always remember this.
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Comments: 3

My-Own-Path [2012-01-10 05:54:09 +0000 UTC]

While reading this, I thought, "Wow, that's a lot of kennings." Turns out that the kennings were the point.

I do like the poem and the name is very thought-inducing, but I think that the kennings are a little too elegant for the rest of the poem. It's a bit too modern to pull off "hell-chimes" and "ivory-limb."

Though wouldn't you agree that those sound very haunting? :>

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cmsART In reply to My-Own-Path [2012-01-11 01:15:31 +0000 UTC]

Yes, kennings were the point and, yes, I love using them and making evermore extravagant kennings. I just like the power you hold when you learn how to use them.

P.S: Very, very haunting indeed. xD haha.

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My-Own-Path In reply to cmsART [2012-01-11 02:11:30 +0000 UTC]

I wish I was gutsy enough to post more of my literature. Writing was my first love, but because of that, I'm scared of criticism, so I just post my art instead.

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