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comatose-comet — Her address is somewhere between lost and faraway
Published: 2015-06-19 11:00:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 1510; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 0
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Description she was born in a dark room during a February sunset
so she called the night her hometown. and the
anthem of her bones was glass chiming, the clatter
of plates, quiet meal times spent wishing to sink through
the floor. and the evenings drove her home, to
Mother Moon’s wide-stretched moonbeam arms,
to her sisters sparkling like champagne fizz kisses,
and the mornings drove her to distant lands, desert
skies and sand-scorched tarmac mirages of oasis
palm-tree-pretty boys. she daydreamed about falling into
rainclouds’ bellies, of being cried out as a March drizzle,
of flooding the worn, beat-up bends of her little city’s highway.
she spent the days half-asleep and the nights half-awake,
watching her sisters blink silently back at her, and she would
smile even though she knew that if they died, she wouldn’t
realise for millenniums, and that was a blessing, she thought,
that was a blessing.
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Comments: 9

luminescent0513 [2015-06-21 20:10:20 +0000 UTC]

this is really really beautiful...
leaves me speechless otherwise

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comatose-comet In reply to luminescent0513 [2015-07-03 07:18:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you cricket, sorry for the late reply my laptop broke and da rarely works out here but I will be back in england and the land of internet from midJuly so we should totally catch up then

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luminescent0513 In reply to comatose-comet [2015-07-11 19:14:59 +0000 UTC]

I shall be prepared to catch up with you then ♥
have fun in non-internet country!

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wispy-blue [2015-06-20 09:32:37 +0000 UTC]

beautiful words. she spent the days half-asleep and the nights half-awake this is like my life.

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comatose-comet In reply to wispy-blue [2015-06-20 10:29:36 +0000 UTC]

then it must be a beautiful life thank you for the fave

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FridgePoetProject [2015-06-20 04:33:08 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutely engrossing from start to finish!  I love the fable-like quality of the story as it unfolds, strong enough to snare your interest and yet subtle enough to anchor the heart of the piece to reality.  I lost myself in beautiful phrase after beautiful phrase, some of my favorites being, "so she called the night her hometown," "the anthem of her bones was glass chiming," "she daydreamed about falling into / rainclouds’ bellies," and the absolutely perfect ending.  You nailed this.  Phenomenal work!  

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comatose-comet In reply to FridgePoetProject [2015-06-20 10:30:18 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much for your kind words I am so glad you enjoyed this piece

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atrophy129 [2015-06-19 17:37:21 +0000 UTC]

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comatose-comet In reply to atrophy129 [2015-06-20 10:29:02 +0000 UTC]

 

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