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Shadow-Monger [2014-04-03 02:26:36 +0000 UTC]
This is the first chance I have had to continue where I left off. I know that this is the old one; but I am going to finish this. I find it interesting how you describe her telekinetic abilities. As a fellow writer I know how hard it can be to discern between speech and thought-speech.
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PinkCowgirl925 [2012-02-07 22:10:56 +0000 UTC]
Amazing! i think you might have missed a word or two but i got what you meant
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PinkCowgirl925 In reply to Cosmic-Phoenyx [2012-02-08 01:31:11 +0000 UTC]
“Yeah I suppose your right Mr.Lombardi.” I think you meant you're.
“Do you know who the HELL your talking to?! Your talking to a commanding officer and I" another You're thing (im normally this hardcore grammar)
there is another but i lost it.
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PinkCowgirl925 In reply to PinkCowgirl925 [2012-02-08 03:41:36 +0000 UTC]
. “Hey Nova, do you have a moment
to talk?” She asks softly. I smile sure thing Krystal, please take a seat anywhere.... you missed some " "
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PinkCowgirl925 In reply to PinkCowgirl925 [2012-02-08 03:43:05 +0000 UTC]
“Krystal you
need to worry yourself about my love life.” I think you meant you need not to worry yourself
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KestrelRaptor [2012-02-07 12:21:24 +0000 UTC]
Very awesome!
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