weezergirl123 [2003-01-31 18:46:41 +0000 UTC]

This id definately a very sweet poem. Very eary for the reader to relate to. Since you said it wasnt done i have a couple of corrections "Like a dream that ends to soon" it should be "too" not "to". Also, "And nothing no longer matters" in English you cannot have a double negative. You have to say "And nothing matters any longer" or something like that. Very nice poem though, i can't wait to see it when it is done!

👍: 0 ⏩: 0