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DarkDarkling [2010-01-22 21:58:51 +0000 UTC]
the eve thing temperary when she gets out of the city?
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CRUBAT In reply to DarkDarkling [2010-01-22 23:01:45 +0000 UTC]
dunno, ive lost my plans for the story
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DarkDarkling In reply to CRUBAT [2010-01-22 23:26:43 +0000 UTC]
ah. well im sure ya can think something like proboly something in the air in the city that effected the eve in sakura's breast and when they leave and in a fresh air inviroment the eve goes dorment
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CRUBAT In reply to DarkDarkling [2010-01-23 02:44:35 +0000 UTC]
maybe. Since this was almost a mirroring of the game, including gameplay and where you go in the very order and such, I really wouldnt know what would happen to the eve
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DarkDarkling In reply to CRUBAT [2010-01-23 02:56:48 +0000 UTC]
well take your time and think about it i mean the Eve stuff did have a different effect on her than it did on the male character from the game
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CRUBAT In reply to DarkDarkling [2010-01-23 04:28:06 +0000 UTC]
But we dont know what happened to his powers, only that he grew old and died
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DarkDarkling In reply to CRUBAT [2010-01-23 04:35:42 +0000 UTC]
well i could bring up some logic on that but it proboly woodnt be correct
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CRUBAT In reply to DarkDarkling [2010-01-23 05:05:10 +0000 UTC]
there isnt anything else to tells us about him. And it depends whether or not he harvest or saved all the little sisters too
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R501 [2008-08-17 18:11:47 +0000 UTC]
This is getting more fun as the story goes on. Sakura's funny and hot, and Anne is cute. Good work.
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CRUBAT In reply to R501 [2008-08-17 18:38:53 +0000 UTC]
ty
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HunterIce [2008-07-06 08:27:32 +0000 UTC]
interesting
is this from a game it seems like it
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CRUBAT In reply to HunterIce [2008-07-07 06:25:00 +0000 UTC]
following the areas as they become available and the powers
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LokitheOdd [2008-06-25 21:59:03 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Your action scenes were actually really good. There was a definite tense moment when the Big Daddy and Little Sister showed up.
But you have a couple of awkward spelling mistakes throughout it. Like....
Sakura could here the sloshing again.
That should be 'hear'
travel through here
It should be 'travel through her'
A Splicer was in the crap walk position,
I assume you meant 'crab walk'?
“Y-your bleeding”
That should be 'you're bleeding'
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CRUBAT In reply to LokitheOdd [2008-06-25 22:05:40 +0000 UTC]
Thanx. My word processor in Linux sux. Thank you of the error spotting
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99Breaker [2008-06-25 02:57:04 +0000 UTC]
DON'T WORRY GUYS I'LL SAVE YOU!
LASER PLASMID GO!
...
...I SAID LASER PLASMID, GO!
...
...o wate thur is no lazur plasmidz. lol, k then you two are on ur own bai GL! I'm gonna go hidez behind a vending machinez in the fetal position.
*Hauls ass*
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GundamNate [2008-06-24 22:57:41 +0000 UTC]
“They look like pink balloons” Anne kneeled infront of Sakura, her face inches away from the breasts.
“If only they were that light” Sakura mentally joked. Maybe in your next story Sakura and some other girls volunter to test a new BE drug the girls get BIGGER AND BIGGER but they stay very light.
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