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erika18 [2004-06-23 05:25:06 +0000 UTC]
That was very morbid...but it had a cool ending. I liked it in all...
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Crusher0508 In reply to erika18 [2004-07-10 23:55:57 +0000 UTC]
Morbid what does that mean I am slow I think it means dark but could you give me a better description
YAY you liked it COOL
and I like the ending but now that someone has finally read it I wam now going to work on the sequeal to it even harder
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Crusher0508 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-11 02:49:57 +0000 UTC]
HEHEHE yeah here is a taste of his edit (ok think to the part of the story where Justin is just reached the city temple near the end of the story )
(After that the noises slowly fade out. Then you see Justin standing on a hilltop staring down at a city)
Justin: I know he’s here. I can’t explain how, but I know he is.
(He then sprints down the hill towards the city’s gates, but trips )
(He charges towards the gate and the two guards who defend it. And then in one swift strike, both guards collapse) of course becuase the emotioinally unstable one is also a god ninja
(Justin kicks down the city’s gatewith is 3rd leg lol)
(He starts walking through the empty streets)
Justin: (with a raised voice) I’m going to find you and kill you for what you did and for what you made me do!!
(Then two ninjas jump off nearby roofs and land in front of Justin) They're school Bullies
Justin: Oh, so this is supposed to be my warm up.
(The ninjas charge)
(Justin, with little effort, lifts and cuts both of the ninjas down with a single swipe of his katana)
(Then, as if neither of them were there, Justin walks right past their dead bodies)
Justin: Come on. At least give me a challenge. Like Cheerleaders with Pom Poms
(Two minutes later you see him walking up the city’s temple steps as he puts his katana away)
Justin: Where are you ?! Don’t you want to come out and play? I don’t think your lackeys liked
my game.
(Then you see a frontal view of Justin walking up the temple steps and behind him in the background, the streets are lined with dead warriors and ninjas)
(When Justin finally reaches the temple doors, he letargecally srtuggles to open one of tehm
He is so funny
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-11 02:18:18 +0000 UTC]
I see...^_^
It's not a problem, 'cause I know what it's like being a writer with people nagging you, so I've learned sympathetic patience. >_< Geez...I REALLY know the feeling...*Sighs tiredly * I have some to work on right NOW for that matter...
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Crusher0508 In reply to erika18 [2004-07-11 02:50:24 +0000 UTC]
HEHEHE yeah here is a taste of his edit (ok think to the part of the story where Justin is just reached the city temple near the end of the story )
(After that the noises slowly fade out. Then you see Justin standing on a hilltop staring down at a city)
Justin: I know he’s here. I can’t explain how, but I know he is.
(He then sprints down the hill towards the city’s gates, but trips )
(He charges towards the gate and the two guards who defend it. And then in one swift strike, both guards collapse) of course becuase the emotioinally unstable one is also a god ninja
(Justin kicks down the city’s gatewith is 3rd leg lol)
(He starts walking through the empty streets)
Justin: (with a raised voice) I’m going to find you and kill you for what you did and for what you made me do!!
(Then two ninjas jump off nearby roofs and land in front of Justin) They're school Bullies
Justin: Oh, so this is supposed to be my warm up.
(The ninjas charge)
(Justin, with little effort, lifts and cuts both of the ninjas down with a single swipe of his katana)
(Then, as if neither of them were there, Justin walks right past their dead bodies)
Justin: Come on. At least give me a challenge. Like Cheerleaders with Pom Poms
(Two minutes later you see him walking up the city’s temple steps as he puts his katana away)
Justin: Where are you ?! Don’t you want to come out and play? I don’t think your lackeys liked
my game.
(Then you see a frontal view of Justin walking up the temple steps and behind him in the background, the streets are lined with dead warriors and ninjas)
(When Justin finally reaches the temple doors, he letargecally srtuggles to open one of tehm
He is so funny
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-11 04:14:02 +0000 UTC]
^_^ Hehehehe...Too cool! I loved it! Thx. I'll post that story soon btw.
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-11 18:19:06 +0000 UTC]
And I can't wait to post it! I just keep taking so dang LONG...>_< I MUST do it TODAY.
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-13 02:08:48 +0000 UTC]
Okay, and yeah. I meant for it to be short. The other "chapters" are a LOT longer then that. It's only intros for this one.
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-14 03:37:29 +0000 UTC]
O_O I just posted it...But I think the freakin' thing didn't RECOGNIZE IT! AHHHH! Cross your fingers because I do NOT want to put that back through AGAIN...-_-
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-17 01:32:01 +0000 UTC]
Sarah: *Hiccup * Sure. I got an extra glass...I mean gallon...*hiccup * Erika would be mad...but here ya go. *Hands him huge bottle of happy water *
Erika: Don't even THINK about it buster! -_- I don't need another drunk person here.
Sarah: @_@ I'm *hiccup * DRUNK?!?!?! Oh man...>_< I can't believe I did something so *hiccup * stupid! ...I want some MORE!
Erika: -_- *Sigh *Yup...She's still drunk...
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erika18 In reply to Crusher0508 [2004-07-17 18:48:19 +0000 UTC]
Erika: -_- I TOLD you not to drink the happy water! But did you listen? Nuuuuuuuu....No one listens to me...-_-
Sarah: I'm sober now...-_- Thank heaven I have poison resistance. It helps me to heal from intoxication quickly, but MAN...It doesn't help hangovers!
Oww...Headache. Wait...Did I give anyone else happy water?
Erika: ...BPN.
Sarah: O_O Dear Lord...
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Crusher0508 In reply to erika18 [2004-07-17 22:21:15 +0000 UTC]
*BPN still laying on the floor completely motionless*
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